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I’ve been told
ladies are supposed to
cover themselves
in flowers, fine wines,
or men.

Fuck poetry,
ladies don’t have
time.

But lately,
Bukowski sits
upon a barstool
in my head
laughing.

He’s telling me
to fuck her, poetically,
emotionally, physically-
figuratively speaking.

I can’t decide which
“her”
he is referring to,
( the new or the old )
when jealousy
on both ends
has me
by the
throat.

Why do I attract
broken girls
like abandoned
puzzle pieces?

Why do my words
not sit right
in my mouth
when I can’t
even stand up
and speak
for myself?

I don’t deserve
to be a
poet.
NaPoWriMo, day 1
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:icondevilsmatrix:
DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2015  Student Writer
to be honest this fucked me over

therefore its probably my favourite ive read of yours to date
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shaviolinist Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
epic ending, damn I liked that :D
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:iconforeststone:
Foreststone Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
WOW! This is AMAZING I think I've fainted. Clap 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, it is truly amazing :D
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Hades-Flower Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
Gutsy, vivid, and raw. Great writing.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Must be doing something right.
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:iconasasser:
asasser Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Professional Photographer
Oh, but you do...  you do deserve to be a poet.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes, maybe.
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:iconasasser:
asasser Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Professional Photographer
Your "Found Poetry" inspired me to include a section like that in my Master's thesis.  I had a lot of fun trying different things, and I am pleased with how they came out, for the most part.
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bailey39300 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
its awesome
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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innoctemn Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
This came out so beautifully, so enticingly.. . It reaches out to the mind as far as words can grasp. There is so much power in this poem, it struck an emotional chord in my system.. .
This I can greatly relate to.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thanks!
I just figured I'd been reading way too much Bukowski lately.
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innoctemn Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
^-^
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MorphoAdonis Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Nice poem but the term "broken girls" is kinda offensive, and every comment about "fixing or not fixing" them is fucking awful. The people on DA have the worst sense of gender and of relationships.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I'm being offensive when many people, regardless of their gender consider themselves 'broken' in some way or another.  And I don't know what you mean by 'The people on DA have the worst sense of gender and of relationships.', when those who commented all made valid points. As human beings we can't rely on others to fix us, we have to do that ourselves, if we even want to.
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MorphoAdonis Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
The last point you made is true.

However, comments like "Maybe she knows you can fix her" are fucking awful. Nobody should depend on another person to "fix" them. The very idea is absurd.

And deeming another person as "broken" rather than "hurt" or "dysfunctional" is as offensive to the human spirit's resilience as it is naive.
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halethaeoh Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
It's a really good poem, the best I've ever read here on dA. I logged myself on my old account just to tell you this. Nice work! I've read this with pleasure.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thanks so much! :)
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PseudonymLizzieDeLov Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
You have got to be the biggest kiss-arse I've ever come across here on dA.
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:iconhalethaeoh:
halethaeoh Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014
Sorry, but what's your problem? I did nothing wrong, just told the truth (believe me or not, I don't care). 
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PseudonymLizzieDeLov Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014
Bullshit.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Amazing!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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faizza Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
its superb :iconheartplz:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Love this. 
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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xXAngelsofChaosXx Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very honest. The definition of orientated in fact, good job!
orientation - a person's awareness of self with regard to position and time and place and personal relationships
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes I think I am all too aware.
To the point of over thinking or driving myself mad. :/
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xXAngelsofChaosXx Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That is the curse of awareness. Overthinking everything you do, constant reflection of things you've done, I feel it. 
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hadasaugh Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Professional General Artist
Nice piece...if you attract broken girls just remember one thing, they have to be the ones to fix themselves...you can't do it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm too busy trying to fix myself anyway.  And I know how selfish that sounds. :/
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hadasaugh Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Professional General Artist
Not selfish if it is something that you need.  Cheers!
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You attract us/them because you speak the truth, whether you know/like it or not... and I love that about your works. Every single one. :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I guess.  :/
Thank you.
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. 
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe you attract broken girls because they know you can fix them; because they can sense you can help them find the place and picture their piece belongs.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But, I'm broken too.
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Then maybe you can fix each other.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've found that two broken, emotionally unstable people only manage to make eachother worse, sadly.
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:iconhawkheart29:
Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe you just haven't found the right person yet.
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Wretched-lovely Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
Beautifuk as always ♥
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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Wretched-lovely Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
thank you for posting this~♥
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