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It’s day two

& I already feel
shriveled, lungless,
overworked.

I’ve been living
out of my suitcase
since I got home,
sleeping
on the couch &
leaving my laundry
on the floor.

Everything in my refrigerator
screams 12 days too late
& rent money is due.

She’s slapping me
in the face,
you see.

Depression,
that heartless bitch
with the long
spider legs
& hot mouth-

she enjoys
throwing me
into furniture-
up against
thin walls

& having her way with me.
NaPoWriMo day 2

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I feel like a whore.
My writing style is changing
and I couldn't care less.
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:iconxblackcherryblossoms:
xBlackCherryBlossoms Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
I feel like this is the karst anybody's came to putting depression into words. I have goosebumps.
This is amazing.
Stay strong love. ^_^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You think?  It's been done countless times,
figured it was a bit cliche if anything. lol
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:iconxblackcherryblossoms:
xBlackCherryBlossoms Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Closest*
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:iconkaelamae:
kaelamae Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Student Writer
Your words never fail to send shivers down my spine. Yes most of us are broken, but eventually we will all be saved.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! :)
But we should learn to save ourselves first!
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:iconkaelamae:
kaelamae Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
I completely agree my dear!
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:iconsoralove:
SoraLove Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Great descriptions!! :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconmad-genious:
mad-genious Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
nononononononono you are no whore no matter how you feel.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
If you say so.
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:iconmad-genious:
mad-genious Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
i do say so
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
C:
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:iconmad-genious:
mad-genious Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
:D
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:icondrawn-on-wings:
drawn-on-wings Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey writing styles change, it just happens. kind of like art styles. and i hope everything is goin okay! 
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's going, thanks.
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:iconshinseinasenshi:
Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are not alone
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:(
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:icontoratoto:
toratoto Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
my birthday day ...4\2...
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, happy belated birthday! :D
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:icontoratoto:
toratoto Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
thank you >3< -i know it is tooooooooooo late sorry-
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:iconwei-en:
wei-en Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Actually, I like it more that your writing style is changing - quite often you write the same body/space/mythology imagery, the same themes, the same references...no doubt, you do it well. But it reads like the same poem, over and over and over again...
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
iknowiknowiknowiknow.
iamsolame.
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:iconwei-en:
wei-en Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
You're not lame! You just...have a comfort zone :)
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:iconintroverted-ghost:
introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014   Writer
This is stunning.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconintroverted-ghost:
introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014   Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconviolet-minds:
Violet-Minds Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So fluxing true
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:iconedvyle-the-grovyle:
Edvyle-The-Grovyle Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is very lovely :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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DarcyM123 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Hi, I always look out for your poems, I find they have a distinctive and often beautiful style, with a clear and emotive message. I am sure others would agree.

For me, it tends to take a few days to adjust to spending more time alone. The more busy before, the greater the changeover. The key thing I find is to keep yourself occupied, and to have some sort of rough routine. Mainly, I guess its about setting little and big goals to work on, or finish.

Then of course, with them set, you can set about avoiding them, and find more interesting things to do instead, that would otherwise seem a total waste of time.       : )

Just don't stop talking to people, is my advice. Whenever depression comes up in discussion, I always wonder about Acedia as a different possibility. You might be interested in it, if you have never heard of it before:-

en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Acedia

Hope I'm not teaching the sucking of eggs here.

Take care. Hope tomorrow will be a kinder day.
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Turbanator44568 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I wouldn't care about your writing style changing since it's still very emotional and beautiful. Yeah depression is a bitch, it hangs around like that person you despise but they just won't go away. I'm rambling.
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very powerful. I especially like the last line. And I love the word "lungless".
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...Technically it's not even a word.
Sorry, not sorry.
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:iconwhimandwonder:
whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's what poetry is for! Making up words! =P
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:iconchasingcloudbursts:
chasingcloudbursts Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Your writing style is beautiful no matter how you change it. And I hope you tell depression to get lost.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's hard to do when I'm all alone. lol
But thank you for the compliment!
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:iconchasingcloudbursts:
chasingcloudbursts Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Student General Artist
If you ever need to talk, my inbox is open.
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midnightbluedestiny Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Student Writer
Don't worry Hun, every writer, whether they are a poet or author 's writing style changes it's down to you to decide whether that change is for the better or worse, personally your writing is still beautiful, it is simply evolving and maturing with you, becoming more of a woman, strong and beautiful as you do. You will always have my support and your writing is just as beautiful as the first poem of yours I read.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much sweetheart!  This means a lot!
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:iconmidnightbluedestiny:
midnightbluedestiny Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Student Writer
No worries, I hope I didn't rant at you :rubs the back of my head nervously:
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:iconwretched-lovely:
Wretched-lovely Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Depression can't stand seeing you break through the surface of the black ocean it drowns you in 
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very true. So it just works that much harder.
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:iconwretched-lovely:
Wretched-lovely Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
and pulls you under, this time doing it's best to keep you under 'till your lips turn blue...Sigh 
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