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Oh,
little godless girl
you talk like
the roots
of your powerhouse
are showing through
your teeth—

you’re no nymph,
or  autotroph
breathing &
surviving off
your own carbon
dioxide.

It’s been 64 hours
50 minutes, &
33 seconds
since this whole thing
started

& you’re already falling
apart.

You left your skilless
tongue
in the waste basket
by the bed,

your limbs
spread &
weeping
in the alley.

You are your own
flailing masterpiece

& by definition
your work deserves
no title.
NaPoWriMo #3
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monstermanga1022 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist
:o (Eek) Wow, brutal.

'& by definition your work deserves no title'
But yet I fight it all
To keep myself here
For all I hold dear

Sweating a little... I have no idea where that came from.
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JazminePowell Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"You are your own flailing masterpiece" brilliant :)
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Igneousdruidess Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student General Artist
deep
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SoraLove Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow! Really powerful! :D

I logged on for this poem, it's amazing!!  :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you!
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TheBodycage Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Brutal.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very.
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Rainyfirebreather Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
I like it better when you use the ampersand, it's very characteristic of very few on here and I like it when they use it. It reminds me of a time when I would wake up in the morning to read your poetry on ironing boards and the small of clean linen in spring with the birds and the bees and all that jazz on the stereo. Please, keep using it, it's nice to see that bit of broken infinity.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love ampersands and wish they were used more often!
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Knockout ending follows a steady seething buildup.  Holy KA POW!
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