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Oh,
little godless girl
you talk like
the roots
of your powerhouse
are showing through
your teeth—

you’re no nymph,
or  autotroph
breathing &
surviving off
your own carbon
dioxide.

It’s been 64 hours
50 minutes, &
33 seconds
since this whole thing
started

& you’re already falling
apart.

You left your skilless
tongue
in the waste basket
by the bed,

your limbs
spread &
weeping
in the alley.

You are your own
flailing masterpiece

& by definition
your work deserves
no title.
NaPoWriMo #3
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monstermanga1022 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist
:o (Eek) Wow, brutal.

'& by definition your work deserves no title'
But yet I fight it all
To keep myself here
For all I hold dear

Sweating a little... I have no idea where that came from.
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JazminePowell Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"You are your own flailing masterpiece" brilliant :)
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Igneousdruidess Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student General Artist
deep
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:iconsoralove:
SoraLove Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow! Really powerful! :D

I logged on for this poem, it's amazing!!  :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you!
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TheBodycage Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Brutal.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very.
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like it better when you use the ampersand, it's very characteristic of very few on here and I like it when they use it. It reminds me of a time when I would wake up in the morning to read your poetry on ironing boards and the small of clean linen in spring with the birds and the bees and all that jazz on the stereo. Please, keep using it, it's nice to see that bit of broken infinity.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love ampersands and wish they were used more often!
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Knockout ending follows a steady seething buildup.  Holy KA POW!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you! :)
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TheAuthorMissN Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful... but so sad! You don't deserve so much lack in your self-esteem!Heart 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's not something pretty words can fix, honestly.
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TheAuthorMissN Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I know that. But I'm pretty sure it can help, I mean, look, you have a lot of viewers who enjoy your work! :) (Smile) 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how that happened, but I'm grateful for this community! :)
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TheLonelyRoad16 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I particularly enjoyed the specificity of the time span during that 3rd stanza. Does it have some sort of personal meaning at all?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, it's the time in which NaPoWriMo started, and participating is brutal on my mind.
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Reading your work always makes me feel just a bit more. If that makes any sense.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I hear that a lot. :)
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AkaiAgeha Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
As always, your writing is so achingly beautiful. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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AkaiAgeha Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
C: No problem. It's the truth, anyways. :heart:

btw, I wish all you and your father good vibes and strength in regards of your father. :hug:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, ill be sure to tell him!
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AkaiAgeha Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
C: :hug: :glomp:
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kuri-hime Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Digital Artist
a poem of such high impact! lovely. <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm, thank you!
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Damn, this really goes straight to your heart and K.Os you.
Excellent!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for sharing such a raw look into yourself with us.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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TheHopeNeverDies Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I absolutely love your poem, it's incredible!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TheHopeNeverDies Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome c:
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GeckoSmiles Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is gorgeous! The last four stanzas in particular really struck a chord with me
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Writer
"64 hourse" --> "64 hours", i think?

But good poem either way :3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the correction--hadn't even noticed!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student Writer
It happens to us all =P
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