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poets got it hard
when the muse
only falls in love
with words.

i hate her,
you know-
that rat girl
who thinks she’s
celestial or
god sent hero
or some shit.

so constricted
in her own
problems
to think about
you

too
busy buying
the stars
& giving them
names,

but
all they do is
scream.

i guess
living out of my suitcase
wasn’t such a bad idea-

i’ll be running away
any day now,
anyway.
NaPoWriMo #5

...I think these are going in order. :/
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miserabel Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I want to swear, because this is just so goddamn beautiful :heart:
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
It is without purpose yet it does what it needs to do.
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Great! :3
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WindFragments Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Gorgeous as always :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love the feeling in the last two stanzas.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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jadamslh Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
In love with words, maybe,  but not in love with a discernable theme. A string of evocative phrases doesn't leave us with much, but you seemed close to saying something which would bring us into your emotional realm, to making it real for us.

Good start, I'd like to see your re-do. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Didn't know my writing had to be 'real' for anyone but me. Hmm.
But it's not perfect, and it's not supposed to be. 
Thank you though, I will be revising this possibly in the future. C:
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DreadHaven Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
I'm not much of a poet, but i feel this can be applied to other situations as well. 
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