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poets got it hard
when the muse
only falls in love
with words.

i hate her,
you know-
that rat girl
who thinks she’s
celestial or
god sent hero
or some shit.

so constricted
in her own
problems
to think about
you

too
busy buying
the stars
& giving them
names,

but
all they do is
scream.

i guess
living out of my suitcase
wasn’t such a bad idea-

i’ll be running away
any day now,
anyway.
NaPoWriMo #5

...I think these are going in order. :/
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miserabel Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I want to swear, because this is just so goddamn beautiful :heart:
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
It is without purpose yet it does what it needs to do.
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Great! :3
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WindFragments Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Gorgeous as always :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love the feeling in the last two stanzas.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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jadamslh Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
In love with words, maybe,  but not in love with a discernable theme. A string of evocative phrases doesn't leave us with much, but you seemed close to saying something which would bring us into your emotional realm, to making it real for us.

Good start, I'd like to see your re-do. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Didn't know my writing had to be 'real' for anyone but me. Hmm.
But it's not perfect, and it's not supposed to be. 
Thank you though, I will be revising this possibly in the future. C:
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DreadHaven Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
I'm not much of a poet, but i feel this can be applied to other situations as well. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can see that, too.
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Professional General Artist
Muses r flighty..living n the moment for the rush of feeling ur words give their senses. Little bursts of life stolen from the moments of creation and adoration u gift them. Beautiful work.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, so true.
It makes one wonder why they even bother.
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional General Artist
Lol..no why do we bother? Hmm..because we live for the thudding of our heart...that rush of blood... emotions...the burst of fire that is creation within us when our senses are enraptured by someone. Lmao... who is more to be pitied... muses for their flighty ways or us for being swept away n our heart and soul over them
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Probably us, because we are so easily forgotten. lol
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional General Artist
I don't know bout that. My last muse ran away. Refused to talk to me. Now she's haunting my page on here. Echoes is for her. Sooner or later when the connection you have is true.they pull their heads out the clouds and regret what they have done n their fickleness.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Mine might stalk my words, but never come back completely.
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SleentheBeast Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional General Artist
Yes she's doing that. So I put more words up for her. Things I wrote during our 4 years together she never got to feel or.live. And new things so she can regret what she gave up for fear and less of a man
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TheLonelyRoad16 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I am quickly becoming a big fan of yours, not going to lie. :thumbsup:

I just love the mix of imagery, metaphor and word placement; vivid, yet cynical. Very well done :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. C:
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TheLonelyRoad16 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're quite welcome ^^ keep up the good work~ ;p
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
This is fantastic!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TheInkheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful! :heart: I love it! Great job! :meow:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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TheInkheart Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :)
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