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i have these bones like flowers-

fragile and finely plucked,
these lily stargazers
are kissing ocean beds,
making love to sirens
while yearning
for a taste of her
wander(lust).



i want to tape maps to my limbs-

throw caution to the wind
as i gather up
every love letter receipt,
from every false attempt
i ever wrote her
& forget for just a moment
that even still
light-years away,
she does not love me.
Another poem from my secrets series! :)

The secret:

I’m in love with a girl who is 9729 kilometers away and doesn’t know that I love her, and it hurts.

More secrets can be found here: [link]

Feel free to submit one at any time!
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:iconfableweaver55:
fableweaver55 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful writing. Love this so much!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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:iconalmcdermid:
almcdermid Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Long distance and her not knowing--sorry about that.
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:iconeyelinergirl:
EyelinerGirl Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student General Artist
I Love this so very much
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yay! :)
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:iconnomnomcookie:
nomnomcookie Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your poetry so much. Free verse is my favorite, and you use beautiful imagery.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student Writer
lovely.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome. :D
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:iconbullcross:
Bullcross Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhh, this would have been so much better with rhyme +___+, you should try it
I love the theme Q_Q
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why would rhyme make it better?
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:iconbullcross:
Bullcross Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Because rhyme brings with itself beauty and rhythm. It also requires a structure and syllables, which would make a poem shine in a much brighter light. An Italian Sonnete can be applied with quite a success to this one - I'm talking about the double 4-lined stanzas and the double 3-lined stanzas - so that you can apply the contrast. And there are images here that would really stand out with it... etc. etc. etc.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just really, really don't like rhyme. It's too....forced. Like someone is trying way too hard to put words together.
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Bullcross Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, sometimes rhyme is forced, but a skillful poet can pull things off; it takes a lot of time, though, especially for longer poems; Blank verse can be good as well, though, but it still has to have matching syllables. Nevertheless, Free verse has it's charm, but I feel it's exploited to the maximum on the site
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GlassShadows-Saga Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
The imagery in this is beautiful.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconchancerox:
chancerox Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
as i gather up
every love letter receipt,
from every false attempt
i ever wrote her

-- :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconqueen-kitty:
Queen-Kitty Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013   Photographer
This was really a beautiful piece, it feels so heartfelt :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
Amazing and beautiful, from begining to end.
Excellent imagery!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! C:
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
No problem!
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:iconn3onstar:
N3onstar Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
beautiful poem :3 i hope you can tell her one day! ^_^ Good luck!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...Oh it's not my secret. :)
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:iconkecharagrl:
kecharagrl Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
very. well. done.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank. you.
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:iconkecharagrl:
kecharagrl Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
consider yourself watched. I LOVE poetry. this was simple, yet lovely. and you're welcome. :)
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:iconsulabyrd:
sulabyrd Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
I love this poem and your Tumblr. In case you didn't know, we actually have the same Tumblr theme/layout. ([link])
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh so cool--I have no where I got it, but I love the layout so much! :)
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:iconbritish-muffins:
british-muffins Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very beautiful.. Good work. xoxo
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconmelalina:
Melalina Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Professional General Artist
PROFILE FEATURE!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
?
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:iconmelalina:
Melalina Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Professional General Artist
I've featured it on my profile page.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh sweet, thanks! :)
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Writer
this is so relatable, it hurts.
thank you for having the courage to admit what i could not.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I try. :)
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I seems so simple and carefree to begin with until you finially see the underlying, raw and emotional pain that's there. Simply incredible piece. :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much--I really tried to show that.
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:iconcrystallized-skies:
crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. I just adore your poetry. You really have a gift with words.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) Lots of practice, I assure you.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heeey that's the font I suggested. :)

Lordy, this one was gorgeous. Truly. I loved the imagery for this one, and the pain you managed to convey.

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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes--it is. lol Thanks for that, by the way!
Thanks so much, I kind of had a tough time with it because I had no idea where I was going at first. Which I guess, is kind of the idea. lol
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank my computer. :XD:

Honestly, the only reason I get on tumblr is to creep on your stuff. It's so fantastic, the way you write the secrets.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's completely cool with me, creep away.
I actually got the whole idea from another tumblr user,
inkskinned.tumblr.com, you should check out her stuff if you like mine. :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hath followed her.

Time to creep some more. /scampers off
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
"i want to tape maps to my limbs-"
what a beautiful piece.
this is oozing with such wonderful imagery, i could really feel every word. just lovely, well done :huggle::heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, your words mean a lot! :)
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