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It was the unwritten poetry
dripping from her eyelashes
that made me love her.

She was a sinking ship,
and I longed to descend
into the watery depths
of her eyes-

just
to see
how long
I could hold
my breath.


It was the bruises sleeping
on the curve of her hips
that called to me like hungry sirens.

Licking her salty lips,
I traveled the scattered freckles on her back.

Shaping an angry dragon as if together,
we were part of the sky, all long-limbed,
tongues and teeth- she whispered,

"Do you know the story of Draco?"
In Roman legend, Draco was a dragon killed by the goddess Minerva and tossed into the sky upon his defeat. In turn forming the constellation we know of today.

I also found this out today:

"Draco is the version of the dragon found in Graeco-Roman myths and traditions. Descriptions of the creature found in early classical writing suggest a kind of winged serpent rather then the more traditional shape of the dragon. Bestiaries of the 12th century described Draco as a great serpent with a crest on its head and a very small mouth. It had the ability to dazzle its victims with a bright light which shone everywhere on its body. A favorite trick of Draco was to lie in wait for unsuspecting travelers, suspended from the branches or wound around the trunk of a tree." -The Element Encyclopedia of Magical Creatures, pg. 175


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I thought this piece was amazing. Though it is a little hard for me to make the connection of the story of Draco and your piece. The way you presented your stanza's is a way that captures people. The italics in stanza 3 were perfect, it added depth and character to it. Though next time you might want to describe her a little more, because in stanza 5 you could add a bit, but maybe you did that on purpose. Honestly there are not big things I can say except this was a brilliant idea and that the way you did it was amazing.
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I thought this was very well done~! I loved how you created a piece that incorporated mythology into it. The imagery used in this was great, especially the lines describing her eyes. I admire the fact that you are able to pull the reader into your text. The use of the story of Draco interested me after I read this, and even looked it up afterwards. This piece reminds me that there is still good literature being made. I encourage you to keep writing pieces like this so that other people can enjoy this style of writing as much as I did.
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crypticshadows Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have featured you in my latest journal. Thanks for the art! [link]
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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Mr-Black-Bird Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
God seriously, you and ingle-nook are both just amazing. I look forward to reading your submissions just to marvel at them. "She was a sinking ship" "Salty lips" Such great descriptors.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love ingle-nook's work too! :)
And thank you so much. I loved writing this one!
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greeenpantz Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Student General Artist
once again, this is brilliant and beautiful
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you yet again! :)
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
"tongues and teeth-"
Love it! :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... just... Wow!

I love the descriptiveness!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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