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my veins are blue
with restless wanting;
your ghost fingers
tugging
at this untamed
hair.

stop loving me
like that, darling,

in nightmares-
kissing the stars
from my throat.

if i can’t have the sky,
i will howl my laughter
to the earth,

planting a home
in the dirt
beneath my claws.
Graveyard lurker is a nickname for hyenas. Also, they aren't like wolves who howl to the moon, they much prefer praying to Mother Earth.
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First off, I would like to say that this is a very astonishing piece. It pulls the reader in to read it to the end.
The vision is good, but could be better. Everybody starts somewhere, though!
Originality is good as well. The words bring out a delightful embrace that explains how the writer is feeling.
Technique is great!
Impact is VERY great! It makes me smile when I read great poetry such as this. The lines "in nightmares- kissing the stars from my throat." are beatiful.
Once again, this poem really sucks me in.
Really Good job.

~Velvet-O-Matic. :D
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tiajones Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"your ghost fingers
tugging
at this untamed
hair.

stop loving me 
like that, darling,

in nightmares-
kissing the stars
from my throat."

ouchouchouch
this feel.
thank you for writing it.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:icongrimmassassin:
GrimmAssassin Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous imagery.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Patrikia-Bear Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, hyenas are my soul animal... so this fits really well with how I am. Although I do like reaching to the stars every now and then.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes I think they are my spirit animal too. :D
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LadyNeytiri Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student General Artist
...wow.
This is awesome!! ^_^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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LadyNeytiri Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student General Artist
No problem! ^_^
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EloreCohlt Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"stop loving me
like that, darling"

That line definitly caught me. Amazing text, as always. Actually, when I read it, I had like a melody in my head. This will be a great song :la: :stereo: :sing:
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