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Tell me again, Father,
I’m the perfect daughter-

when all I want to be
is the crescent moons
resting like strong soldiers
in the grooves of my palms.

I am but
(outgrown)
lonely bones,
quaking with frostbite,
numbed with rage.

A wolf's jaw:
locked, teeth tearing
into the chilled flesh
of your neck.
I'm a wolf in my dreams, sometimes.
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Tomea Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013   Writer
From the first two lines, all I can think about is Ellen Hopkin's Identical. Gods, your writing is so edged with reality its difficult to find a single flaw in it. I love how you write. I hope I can write someday like you can.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't Identical yet, but I plan to.
And, I am sure you can now--truly.
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Tomea Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013   Writer
Its one of my favourites by Ellen Hopkins. Have you read anything of her yet? Impulse is probably her best.
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It astounds me how you can just pull me into another word with barely a page of text. You're my inspiration on dA, and I hope that I'll get to be as good as you one day. One can dream, I guess...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
I'm sure your work is great!
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you! Your poetry is really amazing though. I adored the amount of emotion you put in, it's incredible.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you--I try! :)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow! two fantastic pieces in a row. i really like this piece. <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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tiajones Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
of course. (:
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Bleeding-Magic Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Student Photographer
God, you are perfect.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Uh, thank you?
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themorningtrain Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
What I kind of get from this is a love-hate relationship between father and daughter. I don't know if that was your original intention, but that is what I can really relate to with the tension between my own father and I.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, you could call it a love hate relationship.
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nicely put..
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No Problem..
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Professor-Quack Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
I love it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad. :)
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loveuumbreon Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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saints-fan-12 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so vivid, I can actually paint a picture in my mind.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
This is beautiful :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
you're welcome :D
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CoHMissKyo Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Not sure if you meant "perfect" or "prefect" in that first line...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I meant perfect. Opps. XD
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Excellent!
Love specially the stanza that goes
when all I want to be
is the crescent moons
resting like strong soldiers
in the grooves of my palms.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I love that line too! :D
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Fb-PHE13 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful poem!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Fb-PHE13 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!
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RyoutaAomine Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
This is beautiful and befitting!!..I can certainly give this to my father... no,no, I'll never take credit for something someone else wrote...it's just...this will help me find the words...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I hope you do!
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RyoutaAomine Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Aww!! Thankyou soo much!! :3
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MikaDiva Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
It's beautiful!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MikaDiva Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome :)
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome! :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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xXAzure-KitsuneXx Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful ^^ Yeah, I'm often a wolf or a fox in my dreams too.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They are the best kinds of dreams.
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xXAzure-KitsuneXx Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
They are :)
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furry-dogs Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So wonderful!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Elizabeth-R-12345 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful...really great job~! :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you1
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Elizabeth-R-12345 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome~!
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chancerox Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you :heart:
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Phoenix-10-16 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Artist
Peed myself. Literally.
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