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these words are not poetry

swimming liquid fire through ashes

of dead phoenix veins.


no, they are rough and callused

with over use, their own faithless artists

spewing black tar from their lungs

in the hopes to one day breathe again.


nothing moves her.


she would rather scribble her heart out

on physical manifestations of her own reality-

on skin and bones she worships like a temple.  


"Write of me," he says, "right here."-

planting sun-stricken kisses  

along the hollow of her burning throat.


"I want to be where your heart sleeps."
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:icondiamondsilvermond:
DiamondSilvermond Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2014  Student Writer
Aaahhh I loved it!!!!
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:iconjessswirly:
JessSwirly Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
I love your work, to put it simply.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Writer
i absolutely love what you've painted here -

just the right tones, fragments packed with meaning.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student Writer
most welcome! :)
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:iconyaoi-addict-uke:
Yaoi-Addict-Uke Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
Gave me chills~
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:iconthecmq:
thecmq Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student Writer
The last line is creepy as xD Reminds me of Dracula and how sad his story was. But it's an interesting perception you've incorporated here. =)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, interesting!
He did have a very sad story, didn't he?
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:iconthecmq:
thecmq Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Writer
He did. So misunderstood. To an extent. xD *delayed reply much*
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:iconrenovative:
Renovative Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is sexy........
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, thanks. :)
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Renovative Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconits-a-yetti:
its-a-yetti Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"planting sun-stricken kisses
along the hollow of her burning throat."

i absolutely love this! :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you! :3
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:iconvlemode:
Vlemode Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
It makes me remember when I dance, like maybe the part in how many times it feels... This is pretty cool and I have to admit that I have to read it over nd over again, to understand, not because it is bad written but because you explain things I have never though of ...
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thats good, I opened up your mind! :)
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:iconvlemode:
Vlemode Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Jajaja you always do that's what I love about you're poetry
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I always do what? lol
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:iconvlemode:
Vlemode Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Kept me think about what you write, and reading over and over again, is that sometimes I don't catch it , in a good way not that you don't write it good, but sometime I'm not that fast ;)
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's very well written and complex. I love the temple imagery :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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blueisme Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Awesome. Just "spewing black tar from their longs", should be lungs instead of longs?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Opps, yes it should.
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:iconblueisme:
blueisme Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
haha ^.^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fixed it. Thanks. :)
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:iconblueisme:
blueisme Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
You're welcome ^.^
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
This is a really beautiful poem! :) It's well-constructed, and has a great meaning. Awesome work!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Glad you aprove! :)
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