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                      Expect them to be flawed,
                      a field of wild flowered-
                      imperfections, sticky
                            metaphors
                               & an inability
                      to speak.

                      Love them anyway.

                      Know that when they look at you
                      they are noticing the little things.

                      Your smile,
                           the sound of your voice,
                        the laugh lines—

                               bruises.

                      Know
                       that they know
                           you are walking
                      freeverse--

                           de-formated
                      prosetry
                      on the tip of their
                                 tongue,

                      & they can give you
                         the best sort of
                      nicknames.

                      Stand tall--
                          Don’t hand them
                      something to write about;
                                    just be you.
                 
                       Promise not to fall
                                   in love
                           with yourself,


                      & please,



                            forgive them
                      for writing about you
                           years, & years
                                 after your eyes
                      no longer give their words


                       a second glance.
because this one can't find the strength to love herself.
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animeOheart Featured By Owner May 9, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful :heart:!
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DemonicSlaya Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2015
I must say: I am in love with your writing style. Also, slightly jealous.
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BATTLEFAIRIES Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2014
Crystal-clear and romantic in a way I find rare nowadays... Stunning piece of work, thanks for sharing!
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Burns-In-Moonlight Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2014
that was so beautiful, this is perfectly written
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Angelsnowywolf8 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Student Writer
Aww...that's so inspiring. *smiles*
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30SixDegrees Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
"Know that when they look at you 
they are noticing the little things."

That is so true. This is wonderful. 

(stupid question maybe, but i don't get the last line - "give their words" just doesn't make sense to me. Can you explain, please? :) (Smile) )
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's "give their words a second glance", 'second glance' is in very small font. :)
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30SixDegrees Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Ah, I didn't even see it! Derp Oops! 
Thanks! That makes the ending even more wonderful and poignant. 
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EphemeralMonochrome Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The ending was what really got to me...
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:iconnayaselenia:
NayaSelenia Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle:
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:iconsairey:
sairey Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are beautiful
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PixieWhispers Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Beautiful
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TARDISBRONYFISHCUSTA Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
THIS IS FRIGGING BEAUTIFUL AND I LOVE IT THANK YOU FOR WRITING THIS
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Sakura-Horino Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Damn. The ending really got me. Great poem. :)
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
A strong opening stanza, really hooked me in from the beginning. It starts off with tight formatting, but becomes disjointed as the piece goes along-- in a good way that really brings light to this poem's luridness. :rose:
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
Perhaps lurid isn't the right word (realized after posting)
beauty*
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is amazing. I really can't say anything else. 
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I know that sensation — inside turned out to fill the hollowness with everything
And everything with nothing.
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konakoffee77 Featured By Owner May 24, 2014   Writer
Wow...

That's all I have to say.

Just wow.
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DreamerInTheAir Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
This is amazing, I wish I could favourite it again and again.
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wolflogics Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
these words are so penetrating :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(pained look) (sighs)

</3

I'm sorry that I don't have anything particularly productive to say about this poem. I'll admit that whatever editing you've done to the work has worked out really well. The narration is balanced, based on a solid foundation, its emotionally vibrant, and overall its well portrayed. The themes and the blunt way you've presented the opinion of the protagonist of this poem is honestly true to its content - in fact, right up till the ending, it was accurate about how it was written and how it had carried its subject matter. I personally think its a decent poem and it was well written. Good job.
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MayaAngelDay Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Student
wow..that last line
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craneHARDCORE Featured By Owner May 2, 2014   General Artist
Wow, "& an inability to speak" really hit me, and I'm sure it did a lot of other people too. It's horribly ironic how we can write yet not eloquently speak our minds or feelings. 
The end really got me too. This is incredible.
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dakedoom Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014   Writer
Those last few lines just twisted places I forgot I had. :heart:
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shaviolinist Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have.. just read one if the most touching poems ever. I feel like crying, but this is even too beautiful to cry for. There doesn't seem to be a proper mundate reaction to the purity of your words..
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Ambrotos42 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, the nature of those who are capable of literature. It reminds me why I started a deviant account in the first place.
I love deviantART! 
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Jynx-Angel-Slaughter Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014   Writer
This one should have the strength to love themselves. If you can see all of this truth with such tender clarity, you have no reason to not love yourself. These words strike a chord, hit a nerve, and make you think. Someone who can express so much through so little deserves that second glance. You are worth that second glance. 
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ThirteenthMonth Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
You must have someone to love you. Do you?
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KnightWithoutASmile Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
It's so beautiful and so true, I finally found someone that understands me.


Keep up the good work.
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
sadly so, because this one deserves love, as well as adoration.

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GregoryBlackwood Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem stared into my soul O_O
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing as usual, dear I Love You Emote
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. C:
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome! :CameraGlomp: 
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:iconleah084:
Leah084 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
So beautifully worded <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. C:
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Nohimase Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
this is gorgeous and so very true.

"please forgive them for writing about you years and years after your eyes no longer give their words a second glance" <3
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lovelyday15 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
This is so true, and so eloquent. I love it :D
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Myeengun-the-Alicat Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
This is such a wonderful piece, oh my gosh.
I'm totally going to quote the last stanza and tape it onto my door so others can see it~ 
X3 Seriously, amazing work!
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kaelamae Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
"And please, forgive them for writing about you years, & years after your eyes no longer give their words a second glance." That is probably the most beautiful, sentence I have ever read. I relate to it so much. Yet another beautiful work of art! Stay strong, my dear.
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Grabeskuehle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014   General Artist
Straight from a poets heart Heart
Love it!
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Natharper Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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balut17 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Perfection.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
C:
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serendipitousfuss Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My love for this knows no end.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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The-Insane-Prophet Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional Writer
OMG this is amazing.  So need to print this and carry in my wallet.  :-)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awe, really? Lol
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