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but I write so fucking flowery
it makes me sick,
rose scented stars & love.


No.


Her: helpless as a lamb,


I want raw, aching
bone against bone
exploring the exposed, naked
poetry of her universe-

( warm, celestial hands
        forging sandcastle ribs. )

Southern earth beneath her feet,
wanderlust burned like Apollo's touch
into her spinal cord,  please awaken
the empty space between her skin


& mine.
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xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful as always
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, I wanted to let you know I've used your lovely title in my newest Title Poem, 'ghost eyes and disparagement'. If you wanted to read it, the link is here - but this comment is really just to let you know how I've made use of your gorgeous title. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh awesome, thanks!  Love the poem, by the way! :)
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :D I'm glad you liked it.
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BeautifulMermaid Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. :o (Eek) Giggle Heart +fav Huggle! 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This has some truly gorgeous imagery in it. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Firebirdfly Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're a really beautiful writer, and you're not wasting your talent! :D Thanks for posting, this is just.... jaw-dropping.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the compliment! It means a lot!
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Bread-and-Swords Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
THis is so very amazing and truth rings in this and the words that you used is amazing I'm no expert in poetry but this is one of the best I have read. it is simple but has a lot of emotion weaves into it. Amazing job!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Bread-and-Swords Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your very welcome^^
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Kayla-Greenwood Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this poem! Reality dripping from every word. lol I am not a poet at all, but I love your work. It inspires me in mine, just waanted to let you know :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to be of some inspiration to you!
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Kayla-Greenwood Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:)
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starshinexx Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think you said everything I've ever wanted to say about my writing better than I ever could. I want raw, powerful, hungry and roaming, mind boggling, what is the universe really made of poetry. flowery is good but not when its all you can do.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...Another one trick pony.
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DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Raw, exposed, uncensored, TRUTH. That is all we wish to express as poets, in my opinion.

The last part, "please awaken the empty space between her skin & mine." sent shivers through my back, giving a memory of the last time I spent curled up with someone I wish back.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I try!
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runkantusrun Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing my friend
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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runkantusrun Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome =)
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graveyardancing45 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I wish i had some of your talent. Care to share?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wouldn't call it talent.
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graveyardancing45 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
? You have no idea on how amazing your poetry is. I aspire to write like you. describe like you. I love it. and it actually offends me for you to say its not talent. Take a handful of people from the street I bet only on fifth of them can actually enjoy poetry, much less write it. So don't say its not talent.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Buahahahah. This is gorgeous but I feel the same way about my writing. Meep.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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ThomasInTheClouds Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
This gave me chills. I loved every word of it :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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von19 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
So. F@#%&!* Epic :O
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Poet-of-the-North Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
I cant help i write flowery sometimes... But this speaks the truth!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes, you just don't want to, you know? :)
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Poet-of-the-North Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Took the words out of my mouth. I do hve some dark or more violent poems that i be honored if u took a look at
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly how you feel - in fact I just edited one of my poems because I was annoyed with how pastoral it was to the point where it didn't mean anything. This poem - very evocative and thank you for uploading it!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do that a lot!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's tedious isn't it??
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Blazinmoon Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my! this is gripping! very good job :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MelancholicDrips Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student General Artist
I wish I had your way with words to describe the undying love I have for your poetry. :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Cumulonimbus-B Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful piece.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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BlowYourHeartOpen Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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ForeverMana Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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9bornvillain9 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
i loves it
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