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I screamed,

"There is nothing
wrong with me, not a damn
thing.”


I wanted to believe
the big dipper on my arm
meant something more
than sun marks & kisses.

But, how can I trust words
that slip through my teeth
as easy as breathing
when this star
has only ever learned
how to     f
                a
                   l
                l
                    ?
much like my writing.
I'm dizzy.
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:iconmandatoryyesterdays:
MandatoryYesterdays Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
beautiful word choices, metaphors and definitely format. this is absolutely fantastic

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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconcountessa:
countessa Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013
Love how it starts with screaming and ends with falling - making a constellation sandwich.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconvelvetluv:
velvetluv Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
omg !
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:iconalostalien:
alostalien Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
f
a
l
l

:)

[so much in it...]
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconthemorningtrain:
themorningtrain Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
This is great. It captures... Everything. The invincibility of youth being shattered. Fantastic job.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconthelunalily:
TheLunaLily Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: This is gorgeous, my dear.

I haven't ever seen a constellation on my body, just stars in my eyes from time to time. :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, stars in ones eyes can be beautiful too.
How have you been? :)
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:iconcherryjjv:
cherryjjv Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*EPICSPITTAKE* I have the big dipper on my left arm too......
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome!! :)
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:iconbluezebra83:
BlueZebra83 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
And the theres me with not a freckle on my body. :P
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not one? Apparently the angels didn't want to kiss you! XD jk
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:iconbluezebra83:
BlueZebra83 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I don't need their fancy angel kisses anyways, I'm a rebel. XP
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:iconcorax-x:
Corax-x Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Writer
This is amazing....I have no specie shapes on my anything...*feels left out* ah well all the more reason to be impressed by your poem
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There are a lot of people who don't even have freckles, so don't feel so bad. :)
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Corax-x Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student Writer
Hee I'm Irish so I have a lot of freckles
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:iconprussianpersephone:
PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...I have a bunch of cat scratches on my arm right now in the shape of an H. Does that count?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sure. :)
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Feathersun Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I haven't ever thought of looking for constellations in my freckles...I'm like, covered in freckles, so there must be a couple good ones somewhere! :giggle:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh, I'd have fun searching! lol
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Feathersun Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:
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:iconphantomdragoness:
PhantomDragoness Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely. :heart:

I have Gemini and a cross on my arm. Funny, because Gemini is my sign. ^_^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh that is so cool! C:
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:iconindecisiveiam8888:
indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I have Orion on my arm. not as exciting, I know xD

I think is my favorite of your poems I've read so far though :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No--that is totally cool. Like you have a hunters blood. C:
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SortenUld Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Orion is the most important constellation there is.
He's been used and worshippped by tons of ancient civilizations.
The pyramids of Giza is build after the proportions of Orion's belt
so i think it's pretty damn cool you have Orion on your arm :D
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indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Knew the pyramid fact, but never thought about it as the most important constellation. Thanks! ^^
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SortenUld Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome ^^
It's not just the pyramids, it's a lot of ancient constructions all over the world. It's awesome how so many civilizations independedly chose to replicate Orion's belt on the ground.
That must mean it's important and very powerful ^^
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indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Those parts of history have always fascinated me. I read somewhere that Orion was more prominent in the sky back then than it is now, but it's still a mystery as to why civilizations found it important :)
Thanks for the watch btw! ^^
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SortenUld Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome ^_^
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:iconshendin:
Shendin Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Oh my goodness. That...that last stanza. Pure genius! :love:
Insta-fav. Well done!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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WRITERandPOET Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Student Writer
I have birthmarks on my arm that look like the big dipper if you connect them. I like to think that it means that I'm destined for great things.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do too, we both must be. :)
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WRITERandPOET Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Writer
:D
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:iconthislittlebluebird:
ThisLittleBluebird Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I literally have a big-dipper shaped formation of freckles on my arm.
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SerenaVampire734 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Sorry this is kind of old, but I do too...there seem to be a lot of us with big dippers on our arms! :O
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ThisLittleBluebird Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow that's super weird xD I think technically mine's the little one, but it's still a cosmic formation!
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WRITERandPOET Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Student Writer
So do I O_O
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:iconthislittlebluebird:
ThisLittleBluebird Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Weird people unite! Also, lovin the Vlad Tod icon %%
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:iconwriterandpoet:
WRITERandPOET Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ME TOO! -wasn't making that up- lol
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:iconthislittlebluebird:
ThisLittleBluebird Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
XD NICE!
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Fall-Like-Angels Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're poetry seems to always make me think of myself. But somehow, i think most poets feel this way. This is amazing as always, though everyone says that. You really are inspirational.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Elizabeth-R-12345 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My gosh, I just want to scream and cry and idolize over you and your magnificent work. Please keep up the amazing poetry~! Everything you submit is such an inspiration for me, no joke. Good job, as usual (I envy you and your talents.)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't envy me. :) I'm not worthy of such a thing. I'm sure your writing is great!
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