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& faces,
& people.

I want to forget their veins,
fingerprints forever burned into my eyelids;
wrists I can't look at
without longing to tear apart.

Spine full, and spiteful:

I want to cry
roses in my midnight tea
for these star collapsed lungs.

I want to cry for her
& for me.

But Shame,
she wont allow me the courtesy.
First poem of 2013.

What is one more thing to add to my huge list of disappointments? I can always add one more.

Very personal.
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:iconuselessitalian:
UselessItalian Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. :3
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The-Obsessive-Artist Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
"She won't allow me the courtesy"

I love that line and I love your poetry. I'm a newcomer of sorts and I wonder how I haven't seen your work before. Lovely :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank you! Do you mean to say you are a newcomer to writing? :)
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The-Obsessive-Artist Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
To your poetry :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, well--welcome aboard. :)
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:iconthe-obsessive-artist:
The-Obsessive-Artist Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, I'm sure I'll enjoy the ride.
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runkantusrun Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love it your so amazing sorry havent been on in a while i been having some trouble
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's all good! Thank you!
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runkantusrun Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcome =)
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ianjolie Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
This is structured so well. I like the light, sprinkled rhyme. Also,

"Spine full, and spiteful:"

ooohhh, shivers, amazing turn. :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wasn't too sure about that line, but everyone seems to enjoy it. :)
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princelier Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your poems are always so lovely. I love this one especially, though. It's very powerful and moving.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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Aurasio Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The rhythm is slightly stunted, interrupted, as if you wrote it while you were not in a proper condition to write.

But I understand, sometimes perfection is not what you need to achieve...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No...it's not. :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought the last two lines of the second stanza were startlingly grim in comparison to the rest of the poem. Other than that, a riveting read with a powerful and well-personified last line.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe so, but it's a personal line to me, that many wont understand.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can understand that inclining to keeping a poem as it is, but I couldn't justify leaving it out in my comment. All the same, it doesn't detract from how powerful the rest of the piece was, so bravo.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wasn't trying to call your statement out, lol merely stating what that line meant to me. Thank you. :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I didn't mean to sound confrontational. My apologies.

You're welcome :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries. :)
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Beautifully written. Chilling. Awesome.
White light,
Sorry
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
White light?
And thank you.
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
White light= Good Stuff
(luck, wishes, happiness, etc...all good.)

It's just a way of adding a visual component to the good wishes/vibes I send to people, critters, etc in hopes that my doing so will intensify the goodness somehow.

There's a 50% chance of anything, y'know? So I figure, what the heck.

So yep- white light, DearPoetry, and Thank You, for your awesome poem.
And you're welcome.
:)
Sorry
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh, you're awesome, thank you!
I've actually never heard that before.
You learn something new every day! :)
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Oh, you are most welcome, DearPoetry. I am always happy to spread the word about white light! I
And if you think THAT'S cool, check THIS out: I have encountered the notion that when a person worries about someone/something, it creates a negative force/energy which some believe may cause negative physiological effects (blood pressure and heart rate changes for example)in both the worrier and worrier-ee. Kinda counter-productive, if you ask me (and ...er...even if you didn't :). On the other hand, if one instead holds a visual image of the object of concern surrounded by white light, some believe that this may possibly create a positive force/energy powerful enough to cause physiological changes in both the sender and recipient measurable by modern medical equipment such as EEG.
I just kinds like the idea, and have tried to make it a habit ever since.
White light,
:)
Sorry
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EtherealMartyr Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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VampireNyan Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is simply just beautiful.

i enjoy every piece of art by you, and every time i think: "well, now it can't get any more beautiful. there must be a border for human creation."

either there is no border, or you are just breaking it every time. this is so beautiful. :aww:

thank you for all this beautiful art and thank you for breaking the borders in my mind.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't believe there is a border. :)
I merely write to make myself feel better.
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VampireNyan Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you make me think so too:)
well, then you make me feel better too...:aww:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
Beautiful, this. :heart:

"I want to cry
roses in my midnight tea
for these star collapsed lungs."
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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madwarf Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
wow heavy feeling weighty :( sadly familiar if only 4 other reasons
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry. :(
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madwarf Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
No need to be sorry .You are a beautiful person with a heart :)
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TBHMB Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm getting back into poetry because of you. I don't have anything up yet, maybe tonight or tomorrow...
Your works are wonderful (even when I don't completely understand them~).
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to have inspired you to pick up that pen again! :)
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PaperAnomaly Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing how poetry can affect so many people in so many different ways. Thank you for posting.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I know. Still surprises me. :)
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YahoolYafool Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I felt everything, every sentence, stanza, word, letter...gorgeous
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
Glad it made you feel something, that's what poetry should do.
So I accomplished something! :)
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YahoolYafool Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :D
your poetry always accomplishes something :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: You're sweet.
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YahoolYafool Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :D but im only speaking the truth
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darkangelbb Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This was beautiful. I felt every sentence, every stanza I read ~
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad it moved you.
Thanks!
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LightningIdle Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is just too gorgeous. I'm floored.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DarkLondonDreams Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your writing is just so beautiful. Very relatable poem, I love it :heart:
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