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I’ve been sitting on your doorstep for three days.
Here are the nothings I left under the mat:


i.I do not feel like a lion anymore,
an alpha wolf, a hyena or
any other strong-willed beast.

ii. Today,
I want to take my scars
out to lunch,
feed them your eyes,
& your tongue
until it bleeds sorrow,
and “please forgive me’s”.

iii.  You wish I never existed
as you grind those words
into my wrists like they are
red hibiscus blossoms.

& I’ll have you know
I am a flower, bloomed,
rooted deep into the soil.

You are just a combination
of 26 letters-

an “I wish…”
A poem I'd forgotten I had posted on Tumblr. I guess here is something to let you guys know I am indeed still around.
I was trying to write happy, but apparently that did not want to be written.

Also: My work might be featured in the local news paper! :3 "Wish" me luck!
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:iconpepper131361:
absolutly stunning my dear. the imagery is phenominal and i normally wont critique unless i can also think of something constructivly critical to add on and in this scenario i just couldnt but still had to give you due credit here (: this piece is beautiful in every way its heart breaking but its strong the work is just amazing. verses ii and iii are especially outstanding, so intense! extremely well written love. you are really somethin else girl. im sure they will put you in the paper, your work is indeed phenomenal! keep us updated and take care, keep your head up (:
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:iconwritteninraw:
WrittenInRaw Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2014  Student Writer
This is very deeply expressed. I absolutely enjoyed reading it. Thank you.
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Vanelopes-corner Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful poem
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconjwa2277:
JWA2277 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
uniquely bleak but lovely.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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:iconjwa2277:
JWA2277 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very welcome. Again...Nice work, of interest.
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xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Simply lovely <3 
And that's great I hope it works out for yu with the local newspaper! :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love i. It's so profound and painful and I love it. I've missed your writing. It's good to read it again.

I hope you get featured; dammit, you deserve it.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much girl! :D
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:iconjasperswhisper:
Jasperswhisper Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
very powerful :) made me visualize what you were saying
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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RuntOfTheLitter Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Well written and good luck!

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(A little written 'ditty' of mine here in my feeble gallery)

My BEST to you and yours, ROTL
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:iconlittleblueraccoon:
littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Writer
"you are just a combination of 26 letters"

ouch. well done! :hug:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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HelenaPPD Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow! Good luck with that! I'm pretty sure that you'll have an enormous success!!
Your write is fantastic, with a great power to led us to whatever you felt in the moment of writing! This if a great gift!
Enjoy!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
I am being featured in next Sundays paper. :)
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:iconhelenappd:
HelenaPPD Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student General Artist
HAHA! Good luck! I am a dummy! 
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:icondappled-water:
dappled-water Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student General Artist
incredible
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconiceangel1234:
IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Just wow...
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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IceAngel1234 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Free Avatar - CupTardCake 
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:iconcecegrace:
cecegrace Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow... this is just beautiful.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconcecegrace:
cecegrace Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Writer
Ooh, this is lovely. The imagery is amazing.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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CleaMatt Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your poems are so powerful, I love your writing style! Oh and good luck I hope your work gets featured!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the compliment, and the support! :)
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:iconinterrogateme:
InterrogateMe Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013   Writer
What a beautiful poem. I haven't been able to write in over a month, but you've inspired me to do so. Good luck with your feature, how exciting!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am so glad to here that!  Keep writing, ok? :)
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silver-ships-fly Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

i'm so happy for you! GOOD LUCK!!!

i almost said good lunch

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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good lunch! :lol:
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MidnightMustangArt Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautiful, beautiful, beautiful poem...and OMG that is such exciting news!!! XD
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconmidnightmustangart:
MidnightMustangArt Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D (Big Grin) 
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:iconhaphazardmelody:
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so powerful and deeply sad. I wish you the best of luck in getting featured in your local paper! :fingerscrossed:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconhadasaugh:
hadasaugh Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Professional General Artist

Beautiful.

 

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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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hadasaugh Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Professional General Artist

You're welcome.  I just read the four reviews from others about your poetry on your page.  They are right on the mark. 

Your writing isn't only creative, but there is something else lying underneath which is impossible for me to define (for myself), and is pleasing to the soul.

I hope you explore other options for your poetry including online and publishing contests and sharing outside of the DA community. 

 

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Jordie0710 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
With what you're producing; you've got a solid chance of getting in the local paper.

This is lovely, by the way:)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:icontirasunil:
tirasunil Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Writer
Try "red hibiscus blossoms" instead, I think it would remove the repetition of the word flowers and insert a bit of alliteration. This piece is fantastic anyway. :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hey thanks for that! :D
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:icontirasunil:
tirasunil Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Writer
Of course. :) 
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