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I’ve been sitting on your doorstep for three days.
Here are the nothings I left under the mat:


i.I do not feel like a lion anymore,
an alpha wolf, a hyena or
any other strong-willed beast.

ii. Today,
I want to take my scars
out to lunch,
feed them your eyes,
& your tongue
until it bleeds sorrow,
and “please forgive me’s”.

iii.  You wish I never existed
as you grind those words
into my wrists like they are
red hibiscus blossoms.

& I’ll have you know
I am a flower, bloomed,
rooted deep into the soil.

You are just a combination
of 26 letters-

an “I wish…”
A poem I'd forgotten I had posted on Tumblr. I guess here is something to let you guys know I am indeed still around.
I was trying to write happy, but apparently that did not want to be written.

Also: My work might be featured in the local news paper! :3 "Wish" me luck!
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:iconpepper131361:
absolutly stunning my dear. the imagery is phenominal and i normally wont critique unless i can also think of something constructivly critical to add on and in this scenario i just couldnt but still had to give you due credit here (: this piece is beautiful in every way its heart breaking but its strong the work is just amazing. verses ii and iii are especially outstanding, so intense! extremely well written love. you are really somethin else girl. im sure they will put you in the paper, your work is indeed phenomenal! keep us updated and take care, keep your head up (:
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Vanelopes-corner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful poem
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconjwa2277:
JWA2277 Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
uniquely bleak but lovely.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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:iconjwa2277:
JWA2277 Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very welcome. Again...Nice work, of interest.
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xxAiko-chanxx Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Simply lovely <3 
And that's great I hope it works out for yu with the local newspaper! :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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PrussianPersephone Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love i. It's so profound and painful and I love it. I've missed your writing. It's good to read it again.

I hope you get featured; dammit, you deserve it.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much girl! :D
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:iconjasperswhisper:
very powerful :) made me visualize what you were saying
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