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there are dead leaves
sprouting from her amber spine,
reaching with child-fingers
to devour the sun.

her skin is freezing,
seeping winter through
november pores.

seeking warmth,
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs.

counting the sleepy fireflies
alight in her lungs- there is
wanderlust churning & warming
her frostbitten heartstrings.

swinging pendulum hips,

"I am the tease of autumn flames.
I breathe in mint sunsets,
& gasoline dreams."
Mabon is a pagan ritual of thanksgiving for the fruits of the earth and a recognition of the need to share them to secure the blessings of the Goddess and the God during the coming winter months.

In the northern hemisphere the autumn equinox occurs anywhere from September 21 to 24.

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Given 2013-11-27
Mabon by *DearPoetry ( Featured by DorianHarper )
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This poem is an example of striking imagery combined with a rousing emotional aspect. The whole poem imparts a feeling of the chilly warmth of autumn's ruddy glow, and i can almost see the misting breath of the woman in the snow. I particularly like the metaphor of the woman as an amber tree. For the strength of the imagery, i give 5 stars for Vision

The imagery is good, but the originality and the ideas behind the poem do not step up to the very high mark the description has set, and i am not aware of a meaning behind the images, however, that might just be me. For this, i give 3.5 stars for originality

There does not seem to be any kind of overarching structure, making it seem a slight bit disjointed. However, Technique bumped up, again because of the quality of the images portrayed and the fact that the font choice lends a retro air to it. 4 stars for technique.

The impact of the poem is a very slight bit confusing, but i come away from this poem with wonderful images in my head that i can almost feel. a very strong poem overall, i give 5 stars for impact, and 4.5 stars overall.
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MetalheadGirly Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So striking. Especially as a neo-pagan :)
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AbnormalPerceptions Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This inspires me to draw or write something . . . The power of poetry is overwhelming me at this moment.  I've always loved it, and I love it even more now.
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats on the DD!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Gorgeous imagery :heart: So, Mabon is the "she" referred to in this poem? :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well technically, Mabon is a man.  But I was more or less referring to the spirit of autumn. :)
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Absolutely marvelous, Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :heart::squee::party::clap::happybounce:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very beautifully visaulised.

'Mint sunsets / and gasoline dreams' fills the nose and mouth with both fumes. It is heady.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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