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there are dead leaves
sprouting from her amber spine,
reaching with child-fingers
to devour the sun.

her skin is freezing,
seeping winter through
november pores.

seeking warmth,
the whiskey tongues
of godless boys
wish to decipher
the atlas of her thighs.

counting the sleepy fireflies
alight in her lungs- there is
wanderlust churning & warming
her frostbitten heartstrings.

swinging pendulum hips,

"I am the tease of autumn flames.
I breathe in mint sunsets,
& gasoline dreams."
Mabon is a pagan ritual of thanksgiving for the fruits of the earth and a recognition of the need to share them to secure the blessings of the Goddess and the God during the coming winter months.

In the northern hemisphere the autumn equinox occurs anywhere from September 21 to 24.

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Lit. Daily Pick Volume 11: November 2013At the start of the new year, I promised myself that I would be giving back to the literature community here on deviantArt again like I used to. Before I began university, I was able to help admin groups that featured deviants on a daily or weekly basis, and I missed having the time and opportunity to help lesser known deviants have their chance to shine. Now that I've finally graduated, I decided upon a small project that I hope to be able to keep up with: My Lit. Daily Pick Project.
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Given 2013-11-27
Mabon by *DearPoetry ( Featured by DorianHarper )
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This poem is an example of striking imagery combined with a rousing emotional aspect. The whole poem imparts a feeling of the chilly warmth of autumn's ruddy glow, and i can almost see the misting breath of the woman in the snow. I particularly like the metaphor of the woman as an amber tree. For the strength of the imagery, i give 5 stars for Vision

The imagery is good, but the originality and the ideas behind the poem do not step up to the very high mark the description has set, and i am not aware of a meaning behind the images, however, that might just be me. For this, i give 3.5 stars for originality

There does not seem to be any kind of overarching structure, making it seem a slight bit disjointed. However, Technique bumped up, again because of the quality of the images portrayed and the fact that the font choice lends a retro air to it. 4 stars for technique.

The impact of the poem is a very slight bit confusing, but i come away from this poem with wonderful images in my head that i can almost feel. a very strong poem overall, i give 5 stars for impact, and 4.5 stars overall.
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:iconmetalheadgirly:
MetalheadGirly Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So striking. Especially as a neo-pagan :)
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AbnormalPerceptions Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This inspires me to draw or write something . . . The power of poetry is overwhelming me at this moment.  I've always loved it, and I love it even more now.
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats on the DD!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:icontigabelle:
tigabelle Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Gorgeous imagery :heart: So, Mabon is the "she" referred to in this poem? :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well technically, Mabon is a man.  But I was more or less referring to the spirit of autumn. :)
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tigabelle Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013
Absolutely marvelous, Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :heart::squee::party::clap::happybounce:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very beautifully visaulised.

'Mint sunsets / and gasoline dreams' fills the nose and mouth with both fumes. It is heady.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconthegalleryofeve:
TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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:iconemari-chan:
Emari-chan Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
As a Pagan, I have to say: wonderful!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!  Glad you liked it!
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
:iconsomeconfettiplz: Many congratulations on receiving your Daily D, yaay!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
But of course! :love:
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:iconlostgryphin:
LostGryphin Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconrobson666:
robson666 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation  Clap Clap
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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ghost-of-a-gone-bird Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
the third verse Heart Heart Heart
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure! :heart:
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:iconlomatic:
lomatic Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Great.
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:iconreylinn:
Reylinn Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013
Beautiful. I enjoyed the imagery.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconkizukudawn:
KizukuDawn Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
"I am the tease of autumn flames.
I breathe in mint sunsets,
& gasoline dreams."

Do you put this in quotations as a thought of your own? Or whom is it quoting? I am curious, it's an absolutely lovely quote, and I can't seem to find anyone when I google it for some reason...hrms. Again, it's quite brilliant to me..
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was taking on the aspects of 'Mabon' and in those lines she is speaking. :) And no, you wont find it anywhere else. The whole piece is in my own words.
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:iconcindyjade:
CindyJade Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. The imagery in this is amazing :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconcindyjade:
CindyJade Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Just wanted to let you know I've included this lovely piece in a kind of unofficial feature, which can be found here: [link].

Keep up the good work! :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much!
I'm flattered!
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is lovely imagery
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconetherealmartyr:
EtherealMartyr Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Such beautiful images... wonderful poem.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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:iconsvitavotara:
Svitavotara Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
The imagery is so beautiful!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconazaurmyth:
Azaurmyth Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I love this! >sigh< It reminds me of my very own (and first) Mabon dinner this year. ^^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, I'd love to have celebrated with you! :)
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:iconazaurmyth:
Azaurmyth Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
^^ That would have been amazing! There ish no other pagans I can celebrate with T^T
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry. :(
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:iconazaurmyth:
Azaurmyth Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Is fine >sigh< I'm probably the only Pagan in CA that doesn't have another Pagan to celebrate with >angst<
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe there is a local occult/new age store where you live?
I've found that I meet a lot of people from the local one here. :)
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Azaurmyth Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
There is, but I don't really have the opportunity to go to it often. >< So much to do, so little time. I even missed a poppet seminar I wanted to do cause I had hw T^T
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