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my body is a road map
of hazard signs
& do-not-touch-me's.

but on the days
when the mirror
is nice to me,
i can hear
whispering voices
like little racing
heartbeats
beneath my skin:

you are not worthless.
you are strong.
your ribcage has a meaning-

these bruises are
con            ons,
   ste     ti       & you are the Milky Way.
        lla  

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“Sometimes I like the voices in my head more than myself.”

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:icongoldennocturna:
I loved the 'road map' and 'constellations' metaphors that were interwoven with overall focus on the body; they made for great imagery and emotion. It took me a minute to grasp that the triangular shape at the end of the poem was a ribcage, but once I did, I found it to be a nice fit. The '&'s at the third and last stanza seem a bit out of place, as there are no other abbreviations throughout the poem, but you're the poet and it's your call, in my opinion. Besides, they have little effect on the impact of the poem, anyway. Keep writing!
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yo1000 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
awesome
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:iconrunswithbooks:
RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Holy crap that was amazing.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :D
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Lara0XM Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
This is a powerful poem. I really like it. It took me a little while to figure out the 'constellations' part. It's a really unique way to look at bruises/physical abuse.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my God.

This one...made me tear up slightly.

And not just because of jet lag--I honestly, truly, irrevocably can sympathize with this one more than I want to admit.

I like the voices better sometimes more too.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, my mirror is never nice to me. But I ignore it and go on.
I don't know how I do it--I really don't. My writing helps me, I guess.
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PippinFox Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love poetry with an astronomy twist, and I have to say this is one of the best ones I've read! :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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nancie-x Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconhudgens77:
hudgens77 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist
So deep. I love this!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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hudgens77 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist
You're welcome:)
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:iconnala-in-wonderland:
Nala-In-Wonderland Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
Wow.<3 I admire people who can handle words as well as you.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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EloreCohlt Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. Breathtaking. From outter space :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:icondirtydancerforlife:
dirtydancerforlife Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Student Writer
"Sometimes I like the voices in my head more than myself",yes,I do.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think we all do, sometimes.
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:iconmisstsukii:
MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love how "the bruised are constellations" made a heart ^_^
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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feainne Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it's really beautiful and touching, I adore the whole concept, especially the metaphor of constellation and the Milky Way :heart: Also the word you used here, 'the ribcage' suits perfectly and have a strong impact.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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LonelySorceress Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Student Photographer
As someone who is painted with scars, I relate all too well to this.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I find scars beautiful. :)
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DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Somehow when I need a reminder of what I'm worth, or need to be told to remember what I have to offer, I stumble across one of your poems. Thank you, for being the stranger with kind words :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very, very welcome. :D
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DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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spottedshadow2010 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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NekoNekoGirl04 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this poem... :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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NekoNekoGirl04 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! ^^
:icongrin--plz:
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harecandy Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
oh, thats really beautiful! I wish some people I know could think like that...
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me too.
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:iconizzyfizzy23:
izzyfizzy23 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice poem. Its very deep and meaningful. How'd you get the font style like that?
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:iconizzyfizzy23:
izzyfizzy23 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
<font face="gulimche"> whyyy won't youuu woorrrkkkk
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You can use any font you want. :)
Just add coding before and after a piece.
The font is GulimChe.
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izzyfizzy23 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wait, but how?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<font face=" font name here "> TEXT </font> (no spaces.) :)
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:iconizzyfizzy23:
izzyfizzy23 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
<fontface="gulimche">TEXT</font> what did i do wrong?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
the words font face have to be spaced. I know I said no spacing, but I meant for the font name. My bad.
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happybunnybri21 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll have you know I dont like poems or anything like this. But I like this one. :3 it's cute.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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IM-HUMAN-2 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
Beautiful. I love it! Your poems are grrrreat!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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