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my body is a road map
of hazard signs
& do-not-touch-me's.

but on the days
when the mirror
is nice to me,
i can hear
whispering voices
like little racing
beneath my skin:

you are not worthless.
you are strong.
your ribcage has a meaning-

these bruises are
con            ons,
   ste     ti       & you are the Milky Way.


“Sometimes I like the voices in my head more than myself.”

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I loved the 'road map' and 'constellations' metaphors that were interwoven with overall focus on the body; they made for great imagery and emotion. It took me a minute to grasp that the triangular shape at the end of the poem was a ribcage, but once I did, I found it to be a nice fit. The '&'s at the third and last stanza seem a bit out of place, as there are no other abbreviations throughout the poem, but you're the poet and it's your call, in my opinion. Besides, they have little effect on the impact of the poem, anyway. Keep writing!
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yo1000 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Holy crap that was amazing.
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :D
Lara0XM Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
This is a powerful poem. I really like it. It took me a little while to figure out the 'constellations' part. It's a really unique way to look at bruises/physical abuse.
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my God.

This one...made me tear up slightly.

And not just because of jet lag--I honestly, truly, irrevocably can sympathize with this one more than I want to admit.

I like the voices better sometimes more too.
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, my mirror is never nice to me. But I ignore it and go on.
I don't know how I do it--I really don't. My writing helps me, I guess.
PippinFox Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love poetry with an astronomy twist, and I have to say this is one of the best ones I've read! :)
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