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105 (who?)
This distance between us
is devouring my lungs.
I'm left here gasping,
trying to suture back together
all the broken nights-
the cigarette burns in my bedsheets.

I'm tracing maps on my limbs,
and I'm painting black holes on my palms,
pressing them into letters
left on my nightstand
untouched and unread.

I keep telling myself
none of this is about you.
But I'm reaching for empty galaxies
as I try to remember what it felt like
to be one of a binary star.

Light-years away, and I'm here-
just another nova on your ceiling,
searching this vast universe for you.
I swear I wasn't going to write anything about space. But then I started thinking about Neil Armstrong, and feelings happened.

Oh well, enjoy.
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wow, you impressed me again! I really love the IV part. I like the deep feeling in the whole poem, the transition between the first part (depression) and the last one (resignation).
It's really beautiful.
Maybe I would like the poem even more if each part had a different number of sentences, and I even thought it went like that, but the III part doesn't fit. That's only my opinion, about the number,
I will keep an eye on your literature, you're improving everytime I see your gallery.
You must keep on writing, you're very good! :)
And maybe we'll see you in the shops one day. Only if you want so.
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This is incredible. No
other words describe it.
DearPoetry Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
Homercat17 Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love Your Writing.
DearPoetry Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! :)
Homercat17 Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I Dont Go For Poetry Unless There s Just Something About It, If You Know What I Mean. Your Poetry Just Has That Something About It.
erco71 Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
``Light-years away, and I'm here-
just another nova on your ceiling,
searching this vast universe for you.``.. love those lines..:)
DearPoetry Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I do too! :D
Adonael Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the last stanza and the use of the two words 'binary star' - just made a good combination I think :)

Cigarette burns I thought stuck out very much though with everything having a space theme though. Despite that however, it was a good read.
DearPoetry Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah mainly because I had been heading in a different direction originally, then it turned all outer space on me. XD
Adonael Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah fair enough. I know that feeling! I love it when work does what it wants XD
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