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   Have you ever been so cold, Sweetheart,
   your knees q u a k e d like that Jenga piece
   that buckled just before your whole foundation

                           t  
                       o
                 p
             p
         l
     e
  d
              over?

                              I have.

  & no matter
  how many times
  I've restarted your heart,

  one would think
            I'd grow tired,
  eventually;

  I'm still writing you in poetry

     (in the most inappropriate of places.)
  You forced yourself beneath my blades
                                & my fingertips,
  Licking unstable knees,
                         you were death on my tongue:

  angry apricot eyes, unforgivable sin
    scaring my limbs &
  haunting my dreams.

Cardiac arrest
                 & I'd still try to save your fucking life.
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:iconlittlemoonboots:
Simply: you are an amazing poet. How easily you seem to paint with such beautiful diction never ceases to amaze me as a reader. Your Day 10 NaPo is a bit resonating of ee cummings avant-garde styling (your peculiar take on the word "quaked"; "toppled") making this a pleasurable, rather refreshing read. The subscription gives it a subtle, almost whispered effect. The ampersands gives it a rather broken up feel. In some aspects, it can be good and bad for a lovely piece as I feel while it can disrupt the flow ever so slightly--- it's distinctive (being particularly fond of ampersands myself.)

May I wish you the best of luck this poetry writing month. :heart:
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DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate to how I understood this poem... No matter how many times you try, or how long, or how much anger you have towards someone... If you've ever loved them, you'll do anything.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I agree.
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:icondompteurloup:
DompteurLoup Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Both a strength and weakness in some cases.
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darksonicsoul Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
This is amazing!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! C:
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:icondarksonicsoul:
darksonicsoul Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
You're welcome! X3
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SoundSaviour Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is Amazing!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Student Writer
*knees
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thanks, I didn't notice that!
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