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She used to try and catch butterflies
until she realized their beauty
rubbed off on her fingers;
but she will always be loving you
with those digits.

20 years from now
when even the love on her arms
is unrecognizable.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This one is a punch to the gut. Lovely.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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Animemangatotallover Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome to #Writing-Prompts I would love for you to join. And would be honored because of your talent at writing. ^^
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
This is amazing, such vivid imagery :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
You're welcome :D
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I remember the first time I caught a butterfly, I held it by its wings because I didn't know any better. The dust rubbed off on my hands and, well, the poor thing died. I was so upset.

Anyway. I love the image this gave me. However, "but she will always be loving you with those fingers" sounds better to me if "fingers" is replaced with "digits" just because repeating the same word again doesn't really flow as well in my mind. But this is your piece. It's not my place to tell you what to change just because I feel it's necessary; it's your decision.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for sharing your opinion with me!
( Never be afraid to do that! )
Especially during NaPoWriMo
where I am writing without much extra thought! lol
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
Beautiful and sad!
One question though:
What does "She use to try and catch butterflies" mean"?
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