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More respect
   for hungry lions,
 than man's
        greedy fingers,
she really,
         really
         doesn’t want to write this poem.

As she forgets how to use words
                  (on most days,)
relying on curses
         like casting some witch's spell-
with only ten dollars to her name.

The oldest daughter:

she’s still somewhere in the middle,
filed under
                    miscellaneous

because they had no other way
           to categorize her.

Getting her first gravestone at three-
she prayed
              not to the gods,
but to the lily stargazers
   in her palms.

One day
   she would become a bird,
       fly south
              & never come back.

She doesn’t want her death
laid out like a fast-food
restaurant menu-


so,
       how does she begin to explain
the greenhouse
                  cultivating in her breastbone?
( I know, I'm a day behind. :( )
GUYS I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE! -proud-
If you can catch the reference to my favorite poet, Staceyann Chin, you get a cookie! <3
Day 8:
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wei-en Featured By Owner May 6, 2013
I can't ever get over how much I love

she really,
really
doesn't want to write this poem.


It speaks to me on a personal level //hithit
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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themorningtrain Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
This is so. So. Incredible.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013   General Artist
Lovely work.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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chancerox Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
she doesn't want her death laid out like a fast-food restaurant menu.
...:)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I loved the concept about how the subject didn't want to write this poem, yet it was somehow necessary because one must express or be a conduit for these tough things in life.

General likes for this poem aside, I have a question. How do you make your font smaller??
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
< sub > TEXT < / sub >

No spaces. :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are utterly brilliant!
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013
so,
how does she begin to explain
the greenhouse
cultivating in her breastbone?


the ending was so poignant. it struck a chord with me because i can relate to it.
everything you write leaves me breathless.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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LmonLimeCat Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
omfg your poems are gorgeous <3 <3 take all my love!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
-takes love and runs away-

:heart:
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
Amazing images! Example:
She doesn’t want her death
laid out like a fast-food
restaurant menu-

so,
how does she begin to explain
the greenhouse
cultivating in her breastbone?

But it is, like other readers have already said, so very,very sad!*sniff*
Amazing as always!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I wasn't so sure about the fast food image.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
No problem!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This made me feel extremely sad.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry. :(
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Uhm in Staceyann Chin's poem All Oppression is connected by
there was one line that reminded me of the line you wrote in this poem

'the carnal need for cash' kinda reminded me of the line you wrote 'with only ten dollars to her name.'

I don't know if that's the reference you were hoping for but that was what I was reminded of

P.s
I really look up to you as a poet and you happen to be one of my favorites, so, uhm hi c:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm, interesting. I hadn't even thought of that one!
Thank you, I never get tired of hearing that--as it still shocks me.
Hello! :)
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student General Artist
You are very welcome, I'm just really happy you took the time to reply to me since you probably get hundreds of comments so thank you! c:
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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
I missed the reference but, this almost made me cry. This part:
"she prayed
not to the gods,
but to the lily stargazers
in her palms."
gave me chills.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love that line! :)
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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
I really have no idea how you manage to come out with such amazing poetry day after day.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really don't either. lol
But I also don't believe this years NaPoWriMo is all that amazing, really.
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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013
-__- really?

well it is.
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
The first four lines I was thinking, "mm, good, but not particularly amazing."
But then.
After the next three lines:

"she really,
really
doesn’t want to write this poem."


:iconcryforeverplz:
I don't ever use icons, but I feel that it's appropriate in this case. Because your work never ceases to awe me.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The first couple lines actually came to me after reading an article where a little girl was saved by three lions after men had kidnapped and abused her. It was shocking.

Anyway, thank you so much!
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, that's quite a story! I do believe I'll go look that up. (:

And you're welcome! ^^
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! And that really is quite a tale. Though still traumatizing, it's good that the girl wasn't married against her will.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, very.
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing, as usual.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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