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I loved her like the flaws in barbed wire;
it stung. & I needed to take her castle ribs-
but I was jealous of heaven.

She spoke through her bones.

She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth.

When she left,
I cried big ugly tears
for the First Aid of her
heartbeats

I needed Draco.
I needed her.

“Is it sweet?” She meows even still
with all my self-doubt.

This thing, I must not feed it-
As I still long to leave galaxies
along the length of her entire bed.
This is quite an interesting poem, as every line ( including the title) was randomly generated using my own facebook statuses from this site: what-would-i-say.com/ with minor edits in tense and a word or two to help it flow. :)

I will be making more of these and I encourage everyone to try it because oh my goodness, it is addicting! :heart:
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Nyuuh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
How does this work exactly? I'm not on facebook so I don't quite understand. Are these words yours or were they generated?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Bits and pieces of statuses I've written on Facebook. :)
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:iconnyuuh:
Nyuuh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
Oh, okay. Thanks for answering :) .
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
"When she left,
I cried big ugly tears
for the First Aid of her
heartbeats"

Jesus, I know how that feels. Ah this is so nice.
Another favorite was

"
I loved her like the flaws in barbed wire;
it stung."

This poem feels like the back and forth pacing between leaving an ex that was life for you and life threatening.

"
This thing, I must not feed it-
As I still long to leave galaxies
along the length of her entire bed." Gahh okay I'll stop haha. :D Too many nice lines.
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth."
<3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i absolutely looooooove this like whoa. it is just absolutely stunning, breathtaking!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should try it! :)
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chancerox Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth.
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i reallly do love this. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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