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I loved her like the flaws in barbed wire;
it stung. & I needed to take her castle ribs-
but I was jealous of heaven.

She spoke through her bones.

She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth.

When she left,
I cried big ugly tears
for the First Aid of her
heartbeats

I needed Draco.
I needed her.

“Is it sweet?” She meows even still
with all my self-doubt.

This thing, I must not feed it-
As I still long to leave galaxies
along the length of her entire bed.
This is quite an interesting poem, as every line ( including the title) was randomly generated using my own facebook statuses from this site: what-would-i-say.com/ with minor edits in tense and a word or two to help it flow. :)

I will be making more of these and I encourage everyone to try it because oh my goodness, it is addicting! :heart:
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Nyuuh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
How does this work exactly? I'm not on facebook so I don't quite understand. Are these words yours or were they generated?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Bits and pieces of statuses I've written on Facebook. :)
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:iconnyuuh:
Nyuuh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
Oh, okay. Thanks for answering :) .
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BlueSoulGreenMind Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014
"When she left,
I cried big ugly tears
for the First Aid of her
heartbeats"

Jesus, I know how that feels. Ah this is so nice.
Another favorite was

"
I loved her like the flaws in barbed wire;
it stung."

This poem feels like the back and forth pacing between leaving an ex that was life for you and life threatening.

"
This thing, I must not feed it-
As I still long to leave galaxies
along the length of her entire bed." Gahh okay I'll stop haha. :D Too many nice lines.
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth."
<3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i absolutely looooooove this like whoa. it is just absolutely stunning, breathtaking!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should try it! :)
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chancerox Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
She: a beautiful decay
draped along my apartment,
& the mess of my mouth.
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i reallly do love this. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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cecegrace Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Interesting...
It would be nice to see more!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll see what I can come up with! :)
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cecegrace Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Kk
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
p.s. I'd be very interested to see what you're posting to facebook if you get lines like that out of it!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I sometimes mention my poetry, it's probably why some bits of lines seem familiar. lol
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, awesome method, using that generator! Such an interesting result. I love this phrase: "for the First Aid of her heartbeats"
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I loved that line too!
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Jordie0710 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
For a randomly generated poem, this is marvellous!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, very cool. If I did this, though, it'd be filled with stupid things that didn't make any sense.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Most of mine didn't make any sense either, but it was fun! :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Ah, but yours is a beautiful kind of nonsense.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
but I don't have facebook

this is really pretty and I've missed your writing.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awe you should make one! :)

Thank you. I've missed it too.
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LmonLimeCat Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
 I NEEDED DRACO LOOOOOOL
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The constellation?
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So interesting! I can't believe that came out of randomly mixing facebook statuses. Its so beautiful! I should try it....
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!  You really should! :D
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DoktorSpankenstein Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
It apparently works like a charm for you.  Very interesting.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You should try it! Lol
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DoktorSpankenstein Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
Mine would be highly minimalist. I don't post personal updates, or really any updates on my social media pages.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Bahaha, I don't do that much either. I got one status, "Obi-Wan Kinobi is God. Dragons do exist." XD
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fore-cite Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I tried this lol but there's a problem, none of it even makes poetic sense! Lol but this is great!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You just save the lines you like and keep them to make a poem. C:
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fore-cite Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Hmm lol I may do that one of these days =)
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stealingthesun Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
This is beautiful. I'm amazed you got such interesting lines from a random status generator.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm amazed too, thanks! C:
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XxZomBloxxorxX Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
/This/ was randomly generate? Dayum, that's awesome, sir or madam! Truly awesome! :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, it was! Lol thank you!
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XxZomBloxxorxX Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
You're welcome. ^^
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
*whistle*
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Student Writer
This is really great! I tried it out myself, and this is what I came up with: Sad Times. I can't believe some of the statuses the website generated. :)
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TarosMyr Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013   Writer
Whoa.
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