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don’t make me
fall in love with you,
again.

I don’t want to remember you,
those Sunday morning
wake-me-up kisses,
or the way your
lost boy eyes always,
always found a way
to find mine.

There are only so many times
I can allow you to slice
through my scar tissue
before I finally

fall
ap art.
The secret:

I’ve been hurt so many times the pain of opening up is almost more than I can bear, so I go through life pretending to everyone, even the ones that love me, that I trust them. It’s not because I don’t want to, I’m just too afraid to.

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:iconcolourkiller:
Wow. This is truly moving even with such a small amount of words!

This piece really resonated with me, what with just breaking up with a boyfriend of mine that I had been with for eight months. It stirred up all those emotions I was repressing, and made me realize that the inevitable is unavoidable and that pain is a bit beautiful, even in its complexity.

Having such a deep connection to your work here, I can only hope that both of us find healing. If the strong emotion your work portrays is truly the way you feel, I hope you feel better.

The impact was huge, the message was timeless, and I enjoyed this more than words could say.
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Critique by Lucy-Singh Jun 15, 2013, 5:40:53 AM
It definitely has an impact even though the number of words is small. I also like the way it acts as something that could either make or break someone's heart. For me, poetry has been a popular thing, and when I find good poetry, it is wonderful to read and imagine. You've certainly put your heart and soul into writing this.

If you were to put some more words in this I think that it will become more popular, but, apart from that, I do like the way this is written and the impact it would have on the reader. Well done.
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xXArtimisXx Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student General Artist
I know what you mean... :( I've been hurt a lot in the past, and it's made me hesitant to open up or find a significant other... I'm scared to open my heart to someone because I'm afraid of getting hurt again.
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Lilypew Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I understand. Thank you.
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indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I read the last line as AP Art

Love the poem though
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xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is achingly beautiful in it's truth <3 Reading this also made me realize just how much I feel the same way quite a lot, so I feel for you.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And I'm sorry, it's not a very good feeling.
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:iconxxaiko-chanxx:
xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome ^  ^ 
and indeed.
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:iconstarclanwatches:
StarClanwatches Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I know what you mean exactly.
Thank you, and keep on writing. ;u;
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. And I will. :)
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:iconstarclanwatches:
StarClanwatches Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good. I can't wait to see more of your works.
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly how this is. It is best to move on. :hug: This is so perfectly expressed.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconcgsomnium:
CGsomnium Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
this was gorgeous. i'm very glad i came upon it.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
C:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful and desperate sounding. I really felt the sincerity in the pleading. Also it was a nice touch, splitting the word 'apart' to embody its meaning.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconadonael:
Adonael Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries!
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Stefoooon Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
This piece is absolutely fantastic. Definitely hits right in the feels.

As a side note, keep your head up. You'll get through this in time, but it's awfully hard to keep moving forward with your head down and looking the ground.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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anime12violet Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh now I get the apart part because the word itself is falling apart...
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NoriMori Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
Huh? I still don't get it... Ooooooooh. Okay I get it. What might be better, though, is to break up the word "falling" too, so that it doesn't just look like a typo.
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anime12violet Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah like literally make it falling down
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
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NoriMori Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Yeah. Or maybe even just break it into two or three parts on the same line, just to establish the pattern. Although I do like your falling idea.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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AngelFromTheAshes Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Through your writing you'll be able to heal. Trust me. (a complete stranger on the internet, but I've gone through this)
This is a really beautiful poem.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not my secret.
But thank you.
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bubbmarv Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I love this. ;_;
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Angel--Spirit Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
So Beautiful .. O.G.D I love it ♥
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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atrociouskitten Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
I love this. So much.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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AlleXaA Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Been there, felt that :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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AlleXaA Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
It's a great poetry,found myself in those lines and even I couldn't describe it better :). Keep the poetry coming ^_^
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Way-past-to-cool77 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This poem described the issue I'm in. I'm so tore apart that letting someone new in scares me
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You will find that right person to let in. C:
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Way-past-to-cool77 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I hope so, its a pain in the butt feeling like this.
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:iconaspentail2014:
Aspentail2014 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is the story of my best friend's life
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SilverOkami666 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I couldn't agree more.
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valwolfpaw Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
Brilliant! :) :la:
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Jayfeather448 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
wow
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:iconchemicalkid101:
chemicalkid101 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I love this so much, you're an amazing writer :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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MilesTailsPrower-007 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, great impact with so few words. Really well done.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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LoveGunnerMoonGoddes Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
Oooooh, you need a cyber hug. ^_^ :hug:

It hurts, I know, but when it goes right, it's worth it. Trust me.

Lovely poetry! reminds me of the Jewel song-

Please, don't, stand so cloooooose please don't make me~ Fall in love with you again~
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry, but this isn't my secret. Just my words.
But thank you, and I've never heard that song.
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LoveGunnerMoonGoddes Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
I know, but someone'll nose by and see that comment. ^_^
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very true, they might. :)
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PrincessMaryAlice Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow I love this poem! It's very beautifully written!
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