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Poetry,
it’s like cultivating a greenhouse
with broken fingers.

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:iconvanillamangagirl:
vanillamangagirl Featured By Owner May 18, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Nice...
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:iconwishyoshy:
WishyOshy Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015  Student Artist
Poetry,
It's like the vocals are are the focus 
in a track that would 
suit a hi hat 
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:iconephemeralmonochrome:
EphemeralMonochrome Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So incredibly accurate!
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:iconghost-stars:
Ghost-Stars Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is so beautiful and so true. i think most poets can definitely relate <33
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I'm sure they can!
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SmileRose Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Its often the shortest poems who make the biggest impact :) anyway this was awesome :+fav:
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:iconvincentguillotine:
VincentGuillotine Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
you must not be doing poetry right
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think that statement might be backwards.

To be a poet is a condition, not a profession.
—  Robert Frost
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:iconvincentguillotine:
VincentGuillotine Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
poetry must not be doing you right
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Actually, it's saved my life, thanks. :/
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:icontasldaed:
TasLDaeD Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful, sweet short and filled with melancholy.
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TheMagicalLightbulb Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
Try cultivating a greenhouse with no fingers....
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That would be quite hard too.
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sulabyrd Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
I featured this on my group #TheMarmaladeTree's homepage in the Information Center box. <3
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh what an honor--that is so cool! C:
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:iconyuukon:
Yuukon Featured By Owner May 22, 2013   Digital Artist
I like that metaphor, so much.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! C:
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:iconyuukon:
Yuukon Featured By Owner May 22, 2013   Digital Artist
You're welcome! :3
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themorningtrain Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
This puts the strangeness and beauty of writing into eight words. Fantastic work.
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aberrantcrick Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
If you try to force it, sure. It will show in your work, too. Same goes with any other form of writing, or trying to garden with a bum hand.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, not really force exactly. I was talking about more personal poetry, like the pieces that take a part of you with them. :)
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aberrantcrick Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
I wouldn't know much about overly personal poetry, I tend to just write narratives and the like about odd ideas that pass through my mind.
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poppinfresh00 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
:squee: can't decide if I like this description more or the '.' that you currently use!
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:iconlittlemoonboots:
littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
little words yes, but this does not at all dwindle upon its simple beauty. it reminds me of roses blooming on a summer's day
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xxDearOblivionxx Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
I absolutely adore this. I am a huge fan of brevity, and this accomplishes that. The only thing I'm not sure how I feel about is the comma in the title...consider a : or perhaps a . Otherwise, stellar work. <3
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ll-nerv-ll Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Right in the truth!
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
atleast thats what i got from them poem.
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
because it is possible, but very hard.
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DarkHeartLace Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Its strange how when I first read it I thought it meant poetry was like a rich haven to writers where they flourish in their feelings and the "broken fingers" meant they finally broke from all the emotion and were unable to write any longer. Reading the comments makes me feel as if my inference was written by a child -.-
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WaffleCake22 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
true words have been spoken :icontearplz:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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your-first-boyfriend Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it. Bit I'm more of a lengthy descriptions type of person. Not really into simple things like this. :XD: Just me though.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Eh--it was just a thing.
If you want more, you can always check out my gallery. :)
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your-first-boyfriend Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*But
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
Interesting idea.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
No problem!
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graveyardancing45 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
darn you! You write too good!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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SimonTheGallade Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
a greenhouse of roses
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Moon-Phace Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I like this because so many different meanings can be pulled from it. For me, it means that it can be an incredibly painful process, but the end result might be beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly.
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Stunning <3 I'm speechless.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Windaddyflex Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Professional General Artist
No it's not., not for me at least. Not really good analogy. If you wanted to use an analogy that includes broken finger, a better on would be(I'm not 100% sure of the meaning of your analogy) trying to play piano with broken fingers, or trying to play the guitar with Parkinsons, or trying to run with a broken femur.
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XMyCrimsonTearsX Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
I don't know, I personally like the ideas of not only beauty, but growth, care and life that 'greenhouse' conjures up. Rather than something like playing music which only lasts while you're doing it, a plant in a greenhouse can continue living and growing. While running is too straightforward to give the feeling of delicate care.

Of course, that's just my opinion. I accept that for you, the analogies you listed may be better fits for the way you experience and write poetry.
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Windaddyflex Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Professional General Artist
A plant in a greenhouse will most likely wither and die at some point. Wheres for me, a piece of music can last for hundreds of years. I thought back to a personal experience when I broke a finger right before a piano recital and I had practiced for hours upon hours to get the piece right(A Beethoven Concerto, I think) and I still played in the recital. Every note hurt my finger, but it was worth it to hear the piece come out perfect.

And, well, I do a bit of farming as a side job, and there's not much finesse or delicate care when you're planting corn or soybeans.

I also don't really agree with the main message(I percieved) of the the poem. Poetry for me isn't difficult.
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XMyCrimsonTearsX Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
I agree, sometimes they do die, and that's part of the beauty of the analogy, however a lot of untended greenhouses continue to have plants growing in them (okay, it's not the perfectly-beautiful rose but it's still life and diversity)
Woah, that's an inspiring story. I've had something similar (though not so extreme) I'd signed up with a couple of friends for a sponsored charity run which we'd been training together for for ages. Then, a couple of days before the event, I pulled a muscle in my leg but I decided to still do the run (albeit at a much slower pace than I'd originally intended), so I can understand that feeling of determination where you want to complete something, regardless of anything else.
Also, if you play music then I can see why an analogy involving music would describe your feelings towards poetry better. I've never had much musical talent though, so that's probably why I feel the greenhouse one fits better for me.

Okay, fair enough, but greenhouses tend to be more a labour of love than farming is and (while I'm not saying agriculture isn't complex) there tends to be much finer care when growing the plants and more delicate attention to specific fertilisers and temperatures etc.

People write poetry for different reasons, but I think most people can identify to some extent the feeling of pain when you try to write about your own feelings or emotions. I agree that if you're writing a poem about a beautiful landscape it may be joyful rather than difficult, but when writing a poem about your inner fears or insecurities it can be difficult to deliberately probe through the most painful and closed part of your being.
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facecreep Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
I understand what you mean by how it could be more clear, but I think gardening works better in the analogy because of what can blossom forth from your work. :3
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