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It’s like counting
Saturn’s rings,
hash marks
along your limbs -
remembering a time
when

‘just one more’

made you feel better.

- & you’re sitting there
wondering why
Draco, stuck in limbo
always looks like he’s


falling.

-dp
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ggernaut3 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! It really is wonderful, its a good poem, i hope i can write like you someday!
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asymmetrical-wings Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW ANOTHER AMAZING POEM! You are so talented!


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spillingover Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.What a work of art, seriously.This describes everything its like, you picked such perfect words, and you crafted them together so well, its so beautiful.I wish i could do half as good as you. This is so beautiful, it took my breath away.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, so glad you liked it!
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Firebirdfly Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful, the metaphors are beautiful. Watching, your stuff is thought-provoking and beautiful. :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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heavensvalentine Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
It triggers me, but don't apologize. This is so beautiful I wouldn't mind reading it over and over.
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Winter995 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
You kinda take my mind back to a misrible place I thought (I hoped) I had left forever
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry. :(
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:icontweehooligan:
tweehooligan Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is great work, keep it up.I look up to you and your art, its simply beautiful!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow--thank you. What a compliment.
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Student Photographer
this.
exactly.

powerful writing.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconsognatoreviolento:
SognatoreViolento Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
that "just one more" rings with a little too much truth. This is bitterly perfect.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know. :(
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NikkiFirestarter Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Student General Artist
This speaks depths to me... Very well written.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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NikkiFirestarter Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student General Artist
You're very welcome ^^
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:iconchancerox:
chancerox Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
what is the Draco reference? :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The constellation. :)
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:iconmissdemure:
MissDemure Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Made me think of Draco Malfoy at first hehe
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well, Draco was defeated by Minerva--both HP characters. :)
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Angelalala923 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Interface Designer
Oy vey
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner May 23, 2013
Love it,specially the first stanza!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
No problem!
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rober2 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Good lord the first stanza is good. Like, shivers down the spine good.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! C:
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ComputerCoyote Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
well written! i really like your poem :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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ComputerCoyote Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
you're welcome :D
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anime12violet Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
is this a poem about people who eat their emotions
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Um...people who eat their emotions? Could you explain?
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anime12violet Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
like eating food to cover their emotions
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, well--I can definitely see that. I love seeing how a reader chooses to interpret my work! :)
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anime12violet Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh haha thanks I just posted that at a glance but then I read it over again and was like 'wait---oh well'

sorry for being vague, just the first thing that popped into my walnut brain ;)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's completely fine! :)
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chuupi Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
what?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Are you confused about something?
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:iconchuupi:
chuupi Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
yes i just dont understand :(
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BlowYourHeartOpen Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is great. I love your work!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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nuisances Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
< sub>Beautiful</sub>
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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nuisances Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I should just give up tags...
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Draco always does look like he's falling. It's sad.

This is brilliant. 'just one more'...I don't know why, I just love that line.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's said that giants threw him at Minerva ( Athena ) and tossed him up into the stars. :)

Thank you!
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lanojo87 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
What are you doing posting comments?? Back to work! :P
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