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"Show me your bones."

the atlas of her thighs quaked
as she misplaced her skin
in the backseat of his car.


"I'm a scorpion, you know-"

a messy promise
folded napkin-neat.


"Prove it."

& she smirked,
sure of her limbs,
her scars, & her teeth.


"I dare you to stake claim to this clavicle."
& there are fireflies
alight in his mouth,
burning her alive.
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Short and simple but it sure tells a long story. :+favlove: I'm not sure about how you chose to end the whole thing, it's still lovely anyways. :)
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
I love this, but im a little confused by the whole Scorpion thing. Care to shed a little light?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Scorpio. :)
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thecmq Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Student Writer
I don't know whether to see this in a romantic light or a violent one xD The first stanza after the first quotation is what has me asking that. I dunno why, coz I can see where it's going and what the point is xD But the poem as good imagery, as you always manage in your poetry xD
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe it's a little bit of both. ;)
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is absolutely perfect. brilliant. gorgeous.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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EtherealMartyr Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love the way that you described this... it definitely encompasses the beauty and danger of a scorpion and is absolutely beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Sottomissione-di-Amo Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful piece!

I do have to say though, that last line seems almost awkward to me D:

Either way, it's still a very lovely piece!
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