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sometimes,
i wake up with bits of Orion
still stuck between my teeth.

& i grin, remembering
the face of every lover
i’ve managed unscathed,
to crawl out from underneath.

‘ad astra’ inked into ankle bones
like little wings, Pluto’s underworld
ripe, coursing through my veins:

i stake claim to clavicles.

devouring shivers
between the constellations
of tongues & weak limbs,
i get off
on all the ways mere mortals
beg me to sacrifice them
to the heavens.
Written for =Sammur-amat's contest "Written in the Stars", which can be found here: [link]


Latin words used:
Scorpius: scorpion, or literally translated as the creature with the burning sting. Also, the brightest constellation in the sky.
Ad astra: To the stars.


Orion was a mighty hunter who was slain by a giant scorpion summoned by Zeus when the other threatened to kill every animal on earth. For its service to the gods, the scorpion found a home in the stars. As a reminder of his prideful crime to every mortal who looks into a summer sky, he was put there as well. He hunts the summer skies, and the scorpion hunts him every winter.

Scorpio is ruled by the planet Pluto ( power/domination, destruction, death/rebirth).
I had fun taking on the aspects of this constellation, being a Scorpio myself. ;)

Your thoughts?
Critiques are welcomed, and greatly appreciated!
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:iconscorpio1996:
Scorpio1996 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
SCORPIOS UNITE! :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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CelestialFox13 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really good! I love "I wake up with bits of Orion still stuck in my teeth" The different illusions  to mythology and astrology. 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Ashes-Mari3 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just pure art. :iconbwavoplz: :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconashes-mari3:
Ashes-Mari3 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm also a Scorpio haha C; and I just had to smile when I read this. Loved it <3
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hot <3
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
Hi dear heart - I enjoyed reading your piece. I wish my fellow participant much luck in Dee's contest. :D
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Best of luck to you as well, thanks! :)
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Angelalala923 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Student Interface Designer
Love the use of this Latin phrase :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconqisas:
Qisas Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Them Scorpios.. HeLL Yea..!!
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:iconshygirl462109:
shygirl462109 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
SCORPIO POWWWWWWAAA
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:iconsanskaradarkluz:
SanskaraDarkLuz Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
lovely in the begin, neural in the end somebody is anger! :)
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:iconnightclaw534:
nightclaw534 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
HELL YA IMMA SCORPIO!
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:iconarisaema:
Arisaema Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
I hope you win. This is fantastic, easily my favourite of all the entries, and definitely one of the best pieces overall I've read in a while.

The last stanza in particular really grabs me. Shivers.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I hope I win too--but I've read some great entries. :)
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DaughterOfFire Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Professional General Artist
As a fellow Scorpio I love!!!!
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:iconblazinmoon:
Blazinmoon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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luckynyan4 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
Lovely poem, hope you win^^
I'm feeling a little proud now since I'm also a Scorpio :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And you should always be proud. We are the most intimidating and the most intriguing of the signs. C:
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luckynyan4 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
No problem.Yeah, but I don't want to intimidate people TT.TT
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I meant our sign, not us as people. :)
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fangir05 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like that first line for some reason.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I do too. :D
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Fall-Like-Angels Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm Taurus. But my Dad is Scorpio.
This is really good. As always. ^^
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ChibiCelloKing Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013   General Artist
Scorpio high five!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:highfive:
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MCLemonadestand Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Gotta say, I was really impressed by this after reading it. It seems like the norm for poetry on deviantart (at a glance) is a lot more reactionary than it is concerned about developing the piece and really getting to creatively explore different language use and literary motifs, the latter of which you have done very well. You have a lot of interesting language and images going on throughout, and its clear its your own distinct voice. There were a few lines that really stood out to me, and two of those were right at the beginning and end which really help to sculpt the piece and really made the rest of the writing strong and grounded. The only things I would say are to de-capitalize "Ad astra" simply because the rest of your poem is left that way, unless of coarse you consciously wanted to make it stand out whether to start a new thought or simply to emphasize. Also, I think you would gain from writing and instead of just using "&," as symbols like that can be weak in writing (with the same caution being unless they are intentional). Overall though, I really love this piece, and you've definitely inspired me to check out more of your work :D keep writing!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, the capitalizing and the use of the ampersand were both intentional. The later mostly for the style and I just like it in my poetry. :)

Thank you for the thoughtful comment. Joy to read. ^^
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WhatAFluke Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm libra
Very well done :)
A lot of thought out into it
-fluke
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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WhatAFluke Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!!
Check our my gallery if you have time I really want to hit 3000 views by The end of July
-fluke
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Sami-saurus Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm an aquarius
But still very nicely done ^v^ It's a playful way of looking into the darker side of life~
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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Sami-saurus Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^w^ you're very welcome
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
I´m a Sagittarius, still loved this :iconmingplz:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's so beautiful.... as always.Keep it up!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :D
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purpledragon829 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Student General Artist
I didnt understand it but i found it beautiful :3

Im a virgo...so boring... I am guessing its virgin :/ pdfffffft
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Virgo and Scorpio make good friends I do believe. :)
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purpledragon829 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student General Artist
That's awesome :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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