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i've got love carved into honeysuckle wrists,
a murder of crows in my throat,
& a pack of wolves at my back.

i want to know truths behind these myth eyes, &
the distant galaxies under your fingertips.

but, love me. love me, Love.
show me what's beyond Grimm fairy tales
& scars.

spare me your ribs;

this skyscraper heart
needs a place to go.
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:iconmidnightbluedestiny:
And I honestly mean everyone of the 20/20 stars I gave this poem.
the way it's worded is beautiful and amazing, I think you should publish a book of your poems! they're so original yet so beautifully worded it's like taking a walk in your imagination because of the amazing detail and description you use!
You aren't obcessed with comments or faves, you write because you're a writer and I love that, I love the way you write and i hope you never stop!
seriously I could read your poetry for ever and still not have enough, you're exactly the person I want to meet in real life.
xxxx
Celestia.
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Simply amazing. Quite beautiful. This poem has that feeling of a lover that wishes for someone to love him back. You do deserve the 20/20, no doubt of it.
I loved this poem, and I know I will love any other poems you make. Keep it up. Althouhg I don't trust love anymore, perhaps you'll make me try one more time to feel that dangerous but beautiful sensation. People like you are those who are ment to be called "poet(ess)".
I loved it, I loved it, I loved it, I loved it, I loved it!!
Just a tip: to make it look more "decent", you should write the fisrt letter of each verse with initial capital letters.
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monstermanga1022 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist
so true...
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Writer
such a sense of the vast & the personal, something wanting to burst out of its shell...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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ClosetedWicca Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Artist
"honeysuckle wrists" you are a genious. wish I knew you.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww! I'm not all that special.
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
Hide that you bloody fascist! Stepping all over my rights for freedom of speech! Why, no wonder you have all the bloody praise... any critique you delete!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not looking for drama.
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
This poem sucks!
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:iconkenalli:
Kenalli Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh my goodness this poem reminded me why I miss having internet so much. You can be gone forever but come back and find something amazing like this! Kudos to your talent.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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roztargniona Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I don't know how many times I can just write how beautiful your poems are. But they are! Purely magnificent. and this one is no different. I love it, especially because I can relate to it so much. It fits my recent mood perfectly.
"but, love me. love me, Love.
show me what's beyond Grimm fairy tales
& scars." I love this!
:heart: :aww:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I like those lines as well. :)
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JoePhilliacTheBlack Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
This is a little disjointed, but the imagery is very provocative. This is certainly the most moving poem I've read in some time-- well done!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, it might need a little work. Thank you!
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Diary-Of-Kane Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
I have to admit this poem has great tone :) excellent work ^^
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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adcoa123 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student Writer
I really enjoyed it, bravo hope to read more haha :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Please do! <3
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CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Something about this poem really struck me. Wonderful writing. :)
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
Bloody imbecile
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:iconcecilyrosemidnight:
CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not an imbecile. I'm merely complimenting the writer on her work. If you have a problem with people being nice, then you're going to find a lot of problems in the world, and your life.
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
If you was talking about a childs drawing, yes, by all means praise and give confidence. Because their skills can develop and thrive. But why give false hope to someone old enough to know where their creativity lies? The writer is amateur. And all this praise on that work is ridiculous. It's not even sincere! If it were, I'd say 'to each to their own'. But you're just jumping on board with the masses. If you keep following everyone else then you're going to find a lot of dissatisfaction in the world, and your life! There is nothing at all in being nice, but you could be nice by nodding and moving on. You don't have to give throwaway comments like 'best work ever!'. Could you be any more patronising? Or perhaps you are that immature thinking. Or, like I said before... a simpleton.
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CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just because I think this poem is written well doesn't mean that I'm a simpleton, or that I go with the crowd. You have no idea who I am, what I like, dislike, or what I go through. Before you judge, or insult someone, you might want to take a second to think. Think before you speak, or in this case: write.
The reason I said that this was wonderful writing was because I feel that I understand what the writer is talking about. Or maybe I don't, and have taken a completely different meaning to what this poem means. That's the beauty of it. Isn't that what a poetry writer strives for? To have people take their own meanings on what they write? That's what I believe. So in my terms, I never gave this writer false hope, because I speak truth when I give writers feedback.
And so what if this writer is an amateur? Everyone has to start from the bottom to get to the top. If you really wanted to have this writer acknowledge your thoughts, maybe you should have told them. And maybe say it more nicely, not just plain insults. This writer will never get better if you don't give them constructive criticism, that's how every writer gets better. I was being nice, by telling the writer what I felt about the poem. Just as you. But like you, I was not content in just nodding and moving on; I'm not going to be another sheep in the herd.
And another thing- who said I think this was the 'best work ever'? I would really appreciate it if you would not put words in my mouth. I don't believe that my comment was something that was a 'throwaway' comment, no matter how minuscule it is. I'm a writer, and every comment I get counts, no matter the length, or the content.
What question though is why you think the writer isn't sincere? What if they are, and you just don't understand what they mean? I'm not saying that you are incompetent at understanding literature, no I can tell just by how you say things that you are incredibly intelligent. But is the concept completely new to you? Or maybe it's because you and the writer are two completely different people, and think in entirely different ways. To put it as you have, to each their own.
You have every right to think this way, and say what you feel; its basic human right to have your own thoughts on anything, even if people don't like it.
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
You're alright... lol.
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:iconcecilyrosemidnight:
CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) You are too.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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CecilyRoseMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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SilverGhostKitsune Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Love it!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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parasite-z Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012   Digital Artist
Dreamlike <3 I loved this.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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rookiez-cookiez Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ah so beautiful <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
show me whats beyond Grimm fairy tales
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*what's
*fairytales
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fixed what's, but fairy tales is correct, that is the title of the book.
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edmidt Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
wow finally good poetry on the front page. insta watch
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, and wow! <3
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XxfAtPAndAXx Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Whoa
I understand now.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Understand what?
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XxfAtPAndAXx Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
How you feel. :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh. :heart:
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Bleeding-Magic Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student Photographer
This beauty is on a whole other level. :heart:
Your simply fantastic! The way you weave your words in such sentences and phrases leave me speechless.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww wow, thank you! I am glad to have moved you!
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