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Over 1,000 letters have found their way
to the pulsating heart of my wastebasket.


Until you.


You carried them away saying, "I'll use these
to fill the empty spaces of my universe."

You proceeded to tape them to your eyelids,
wear them like Augusts leaves along your limbs.

"I will be your voice and I will sing your words to the trees."
Slender spider fingers prancing across my misspelled scrawl.
I hate titles.
If I had it my way, everything would be 'untitled 1-2-3-etc etc' -_-;

Oh yeah, I have writers block.
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I absolutely love it. Deep as Angel Falls, you are :). I love the extremity of your subtlety; more simple-minded people wouldn't be able to make sense of this. Idrk if that's a good thing, but I dig it lol xP. I'm amazed at how something so short can make such a big impact, as it did to me. Does this writing apply to something that has actually happened in your life, or did you just feed off observing someone else? Also, Ima have to give you props on the title(even though you said you hate them xD) Btw, I hate titles too xD
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I hate titles too!. I really loved this piece. The way you choose you words to describe certain actions is simply beautiful.

My personal favorite part:

You proceeded to tape them to your eyelids,
wear them like Augusts leaves along your limbs.

"I will be your voice and I will sing your words to the trees."
Slender spider fingers prancing across my misspelled scrawl.

The imagery evoked is stunning.

Although I am no expert to discuss techniques, however I like yours simple because I enjoy reading your poems and can relate to them.

Simply a beautiful poem all in all with a unique driving force behind.
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Writer
Makes me want to tear up words & tape them back together...
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moonangel999 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, what a beautiful poem! :love:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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moonangel999 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
No problem :) You have such a talent for writing, keep it up!
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EssJayHyooz Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional Writer
I wish I could make my words sounds the way I read your poems. Though this is shorter and in a way simpler to your usual pieces I am used to, I think the imagery is so much stronger.
When I read these words aloud, they feel taboo; I whispered it when I first read it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is a lot simpler.
Mainly because I feel as if I'm in a rut or something.
I can't seem to say what I want to.
But I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.
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Vlemode Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Girl words don't come to me right now, I just dont know what to do cuse, you talk with such truth that it hurts.
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xxAiko-chanxx Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was lovely. I always feel like I'm reading an beautiful fairy tale whenever I read yur poems. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh what a compliment!
I wish! :heart:
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Cezille07 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I've been faving some of your work, but all of them do quite leave me breathless. Another wonderful poem, this is!
Must...+watch...
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