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  • Dance with fistfuls of roses, shred their petals one by one and wear their thorns like armor.

  • Write your secrets between the folds of paper cranes and tuck them safely between the empty spaces of your castle ribs.

  • Open your broken heart to hummingbirds, allow them the warmth and shelter of your arms.

  • Rebel. Tape poetry to your limbs, Cummings and Sandburg and Sexton.

  • Take a walk outside of your skin for a while, run with wolves.

  • Extinguish that forest fire that’s been curling too long in your lungs.

  • Be that lionhearted girl those snobby poets always write about.

  • Allow that cavern of stars in your throat to speak your truths in uppercase letters, in free verse yet to be proofread.

  • Write about wars and victory.

  • Be the hero.

  • Save yourself.
Someone asked me this very question on my ask forum: [link]
Figured it was fitting.
Hope everyone is having a wonderful Valentines Day! :)
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This is well written and, well, it certainly finds an effective way to deal with heartbreak, and in ways that I find very attractive to read and imagine.

Let's look closer.

The descriptions are rather colorful, and they vary, which is a good way to keep interest.

You not only describe fanciful images, but real ones that can actually be done as well, which is definitely attractive.

Furtermore, the emotion is clearly and definably present in the writing, and that is an important thing to master. No emotion means it is dry and will seem a pointless read, even if it is not so when you get to the heart of the content.

To sum it up, well done, and keep up the good work.
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Beautiful diction, as always. It speaks to me - not as strongly as your other pieces, but it does.

Vision: I gave this a 4 because, although it isn't very vivid as some of your pieces are, you clearly had to notice things - consciously or not - to come up with such an accurate list.

Originality: This has a 4 and a half for having it in this format. It's perfect for what you seem to be attempting to convey. The approach - it reads like a 'how to' - is very unusual, making it original, in my mind.

Technique: See above. The other half a point is for diction and the order of words in the sentences - the emphasis is neatly done.

Impact: Surprisingly, I had to give it a 3 because - for me, at least - it wasn't earth-shattering. It didn't really hold much weight for the reader... but it was still a pleasant enough read.

As pleasant as your beautifully morbid works are. ;)
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Cezille07 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"Allow that cavern of stars in your throat to speak your truths in uppercase letters, in free verse yet to be proofread."
I am in tears. This line speaks to me. :meow:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow. fantastic.
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gear-bound-deamon Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
All of them are wonderful. And might I add that it sounds healthier than trying to drown it in whiskey.
We all know problems can hold their breath for a lifetime...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...I was actually going to put, 'drown in whiskey' at first, but I thought better of it.
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chancerox Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is simply stunning. and just what i needed, as usual :) please, always keep writing.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will! Thank you!
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graveyardancing45 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I LOVE IT. it really is inspiring and beautiful
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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flummo Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Oh you and how brilliant you are.

"Take a walk outside of your skin for a while, run with wolves."
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hardly, but thank you! :)
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student Writer
I'm taken by your new style - The line structure is interesting and each line the meaning is fleshed out with an attractive choice of words. It also has an inspirational vibe to it. I like it - Well done :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
I was trying something a little different. ^^
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Your welcome. You tried, you did, and it worked out very well. Well done.
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student Writer
wow - each image commands my senses. what a compelling, reassuring work. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Student Writer
Welcome, as always! :D
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This poem speaks for itself. I need not go further than that.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Lilypew Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome. :)
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Cyluho Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That is so fucking wonderful, I love it >.<
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Sassycat2 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I needed this, and it's awesome. Thanks
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, and you're welcome! :)
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NoPointAtAll Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
or just give up on love
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Never give up on love.
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NoPointAtAll Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
meh
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craneHARDCORE Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013   General Artist
I just wanted you to know that this amazing piece of art has inspired me. [link] :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh--so cool! :D Thanks for sharing!
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craneHARDCORE Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013   General Artist
No problem!!
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faerismoka Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love how deeply it touches me. (Therefore it reminds me I can't conquer a heartbreak just yet because who has heartbreaks on people they never had in the first place?)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
All the time.
People can have heartbreak for many different reasons.
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faerismoka Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:(
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prettyfarna30 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Wow.
Good work, keep it up !! :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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tinaaw Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely words
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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christinangus Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Hi! I really do adore your poems, they're really an inspirational and I just love them! The one with the letters on the train was just simply amazing. I fell in love with it and then it all ended too soon. I loved it. :) And I love this one, in fact all your poetry. :) Haha, sorry, I just really needed to say that. ^-^
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought of making it longer, but I couldn't think of anything else at the time.
Thank you!
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christinangus Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
anytime! haha, you should do a sequel of some sort, it'd be really nice and good. :))
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm--"Ways to conquer 'something else'" LOL
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christinangus Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
haha, sounds good! xD
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vaveevo Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Excellent -- wonderful imagery.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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lucyjewel Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow... amazayn...
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
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lucyjewel Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah! No prblemo! It was reeeaaally good!
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edgarlee Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
is true :D is all :D
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