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Okay, I'll try this out~!

Pros:

• The grammar in this is very good
• Correct usage of vocabulary
• There is a lot of emotion put into this
• Very original concept
• Good concept
• Placed positive reactions into a negative situation

Cons:
• Hard to understand
• "&" should be replaced with "and"
• In the line "that's what writers block feels like," , "writer's block " is the correct punctuation.

~I hope this helped and I am sorry if anyone disagrees, this is my opinion and what I think the author should play around with for future poems or writings ~
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38 out of 42 deviants thought this was fair.

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I loved the effect this poem has. It gives the reader a sense of what readers block is and can be... I have personally been through that sense many times before yet wish no other to experience it for it can change your view on the story and alter it from what you might have originally wrote if not for the writers block
I agree with :iconderpanimal: that the & sign should be replaced with "and" but disagree on the change of writers block, it is spelled correctly in the poem...

This is a truly unique poem..I love this in whole <3

I hope you continue with your most beautiful poems.
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ghearradh Featured By Owner May 1, 2013

i can't express how beautiful this is. the words flow together like they are pebbles in a river. this poem is simply amazing.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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sulabyrd Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Featured on my Tumblr blog: [link].
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you!
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Student Writer
Wow....this is beautifully put! I'm a writer too, so your words struck a particular chord in me:D Well said!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome:aww:
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somethingsophie Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013   Writer
Absolutely stunning.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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sulabyrd Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013
Featured: [link].
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YahoolYafool Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. There's no other way to say it besides, I love it.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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YahoolYafool Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :D
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:iconcreyn:
Creyn Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Beautiful... :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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tiajones Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i adore this. :heart: :heart:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
of course. (:
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chancerox Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
sometimes, through all the abstract, we forget how powerful simplicity can be. this is gorgeous. you are truly talented.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I was trying a little different style with this one.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
This is beautiful, and rather fitting as you words had such a huge impact like a car crash :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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EtherealMartyr Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a beautiful way to describe poetry.

:heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my god i love this one...:)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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MiraKHall Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Are you sick, man? I was scared out of my mind when I made a fender-bender -- I thought I was going to jail for not being careful (I was new to driving at the time)!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, I'm not sick. And neither did I say the car crash itself was beautiful.
Wrecks can mean the end of lives. The end of a life is never good.
And, I'm sorry for your fender-bender.
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silver-ships-fly Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
a lovely poem. :heart:

i've been in a car crash. (a roll over in the country on top of a hill)
i remember playing rock, paper, scissors with my friends in the back seat.
together we said, "rock, paper, scissors, shoot!" & right when we said shoot,
the car started rolling down the hill. it was like i pushed a go button. it all
went in slow motion. i looked at my mom in the front seat, then at my friend
beside me, & then i closed my eyes. all 3 of us kept saying "Jesus" over &
over again until it stopped. when it was over, some people saw us & flipped
the car back around (it landed on it's side). we rolled 3 times & i hardly had
a scratch, just some bruises form the impact. i was 11 then.
i don't remember being scared. i just remember holding on & after, crying
because i was relieved to be sitting in the grass waiting for the ambulance to come.

so i thank i know what you’re talking about. i’d call it beautiful.
i don’t know why, it just was in it’s own why.
but only after.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't remember crying. I was around 11 too.
My mom went to stop at a red light, but her breaks gave out. The car didn't stop and we had a head on collision with an oncoming, speeding car. Our car started spinning and we eventually hit a pole. All I remember was being in the back seat with my sister next to me in the middle. It's suspected that out of reflex I grabbed my sister and held on. The men at the scene said that had I not grabbed for her, she more then likely would have went through the windshield because they found her seat belt wouldn't have held her due to her smaller size. I walked away with all those bruises. Her? One cut along her knee.

The aftermath, the realizing your still alive, that's where the beauty comes from. Adrenaline makes you see everything as brighter for a time.
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silver-ships-fly Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so ture
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:iconwei-en:
wei-en Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
This is a beautiful poem!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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oedipa Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
A lovely poem. The imagery you use is fitting, and I love the way you've structured this poem. Short, concise, beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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resuki Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The best art makes you think. I literally said to a friend today that there's nothing beautiful about bruises. I still feel that way, but this piece made me stop to reflect, so clearly it's done its job.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They are beautiful when you can say, "Hey I managed to only walk away with a few bruises, yay!" :)
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resuki Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
THAT is very true!
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knux33 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Despite the critics going against the '&' I quite like it. Little things like that are completely up to individual perspective, and there's likely to be people on both sides of that fence. But, overall, I very much enjoy this poem. The first line grabs the reader's attention, and the overall simile of the piece is definitely a strong punch to a human being's 'feelings' box.

The only line I feel that doesn't entirely fit is the line "Flashbacks." as the work itself gives a variety of images and memories to most readers without needing to invoke the word flashbacks directly.

In short: Great work, in my opinion. C:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, some people seem to be confused anyway. With, or without it. lol
That line was actually longer before I eventually scratched it out.

Thank you for your opinion. :D
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Mermaid-Melly Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
This is full of emotion. Love it.
Stay inspired~ :>
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'll try.
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Mermaid-Melly Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
<3 No problem
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Azurellia Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
This is a good poem, but the analogy itself is a little... I mean, it's creative, and a neat perspective, but... and I don't want to be that person, but I don't think a person who gets into a wreck is going to think it's so beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...I wasn't lying when I'd said 'I was in a wreck once'.
And I did have those bruises.
The 'flashback' sort of just came to me before I tried to write.
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Azurellia Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Ah? Well, I wasn't accusing you of never having been in one yourself, since it wasn't apparently obvious that you were speaking from experience. I've been in one myself and most certainly would not describe it that way, but that's not what I'm talking about. I was only saying that I thought it was an odd comparison on a potentially touchy subject, but I'm sorry to hear about your accident.
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derpystar214 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   Digital Artist
Beautifully confusing to me. :)
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
I like it!
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Chiyo-783 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So true for all kinds of writing.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I suppose.
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