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i.   On some nights,
    street lights guide
    this lonely heart
    to her lonely bed.


ii.  In this universe of twilight skin
    & mismatched bones,
    I wonder just how many poems sleep
    beneath the inkwell of her eyes.


iii.  My body is a house of stars,
     and her palms are black holes
     sucking ( me ) into their vortex of



     nothing.


iv.   She says, "Please—my moon,
     please—give these bones a reason
     to stay."

    & I am whispering lovelies
    into the sanctuary of her heartbeats.


v.   "Goddess temple,
     sunset eyes, &
     my windowpane love-

     Let us eat the stars
     together."
If you follow me on tumblr, you might have seen the birth of this little gem. And I have to say--I am very impressed with myself. I've fallen in love.
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CheshlyTheEpic's avatar
:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

The vivid, in-depth, yet smooth texture of this masterpiece was absolutely ethereal. I felt as though I was allowed to partake in this forbidden fruit. Not only because it captivated me so. But because I enjoyed the place in which the reader was able to take. Marvelous read.

I think it would've been more breathtaking (>craves a heart attack<) if you had gave us more about the woman. The Goddess Temple? Well, while you shared your thoughts, I would've enjoyed a little less mystery. Explanation, is what I suggest.

But I still loved it. Marvelous job. Keep it up, please.