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i need to stop looking
for death in every body
my fingers touch.

i have been force fed
old lovers, & slices
of the moons lying dust
for years-

i am messy poems;
i am fractured confessions.

i am laughter
& teeth.

my jaws ache
with the taste of
wolves blood,
& names.

i am still hungry.

give me your sugar;
I will share my breath.

remember,
you are still made of starstuff,
& i am no longer caged.
hehehehe.

Baby, she's always been my spirit animal
& she tells me to do wicked things.

( I find this humorous because of reasons. )
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This is art in its own glory, dark, but intricately well thought out, Well done! That of which by I mean very well done! Your, how should i put, creepiness? Goes very well in the mood. Its exactly what Deviant art needs more of in poets, someone they can relate on and have some kind of reference to! I would suggest more subtle poems such as you've made here today and consider it as more than just something to post on this site! I'm sure if you put your heart into it, you'll make even more great works, keep at it my friend!
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Student Writer
"i am laughter
& teeth." 

the simple punchy lines... :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014   General Artist
i don't know how a poem can be
so hair-raising and ravishing at once
as this is

magificent magical piece you have here
dearest kayla :clap:
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you girlie! <3
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Grabeskuehle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014   General Artist
I think cats in general are the best / most passionate lovers Heart 
Hyenas too, i know what i speak of :D
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darksack100 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
I cant understand this because of reasons
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Most wouldn't, but that's ok! :)
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darksack100 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
thanks mate I am a dummy! 
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:iconkartiksharma:
kartiksharma Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Beautiful 
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Student Writer
I really love how the last stanza pulls everything together. :heart:
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indecisiveiam8888 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I find this humorous because reasons too. You can't know how perfect this just was for me
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:iconblackbowfin:
BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good flow n word choice.  Nice.
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:icontarosmyr:
TarosMyr Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014   Writer
Heck yes.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
C:
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Phan5everx2 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The last lines make me feel like a hyena has a vendetta against a wolf and so plans to eat the moon
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...Maybe. ;)
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DeviantAngel2014 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful and haunting poem, It makes you think. Thumbs up. :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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TsukaLavire Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
Holy jujubees this is awesome
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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fuyu-oleander Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really like this.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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fuyu-oleander Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome! :meow:
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PhantomxHeart Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very haunting and resonates deep within one's being. Very beautiful..
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, glad you think so.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
Getting better every freaking time!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am literally speechless, this is so amazing. I can honestly say this is one of the most beautiful things I've read in a long time, perhaps ever, and I don't think that's an exaggeration. Your work flows in a way I can only wish mine did, haha. You have incredible talent! <3
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MetalheadGirly Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful, as always :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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MetalheadGirly Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:)
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:iconpoetryprince:
poetryprince Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
lately you've been listening to meatloaf introduction to the song "hot summer night" ;)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
...So creepy how accurate that is, but no I've actually never heard it until just now that you mentioned it. haha
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
Delicious.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
;)
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hipsterfaust Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student Writer
i particularly enjoy the stanza 

'give me your sugar; 
i will share my breath.'

as well as the line

'you are still made of starstuff'.
it flows extremely well and i am in love.

there is something both relenting and relentless in this.

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TheAuthorMissN Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing, as usual. :) (Smile) 
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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TheAuthorMissN Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wink/Razz 
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Rema-Alkhany Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
It's a romantic text and snapshot.thanks.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
always amazing imagery:) original too
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Ricardo. :heart:
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DoktorSpankenstein Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
boom
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I just scheduled my appointment for my next tattoo. :heart:
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DoktorSpankenstein Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
Do tell!
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