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There are lovers
I will never be able to
crawl out from underneath;

I’m caving in, lungs
no longer able
to exhale lovely things.

However hollow, I’ve got
these artist hands,

these god hands of mine
that can save lives.

What’s the point
when I’ve got little
writer veins

& no one can ever seem
to find my pulse?
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Phoenix-10-16 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Student Artist
Oh my God. This is absolutely..Touching. It makes one's heart beat like the warning drum of an Indian Tribe.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Phoenix-10-16 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student Artist
Seriously it's so beautiful! My heart almost beat right out of my chest! <3 <3
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chancerox Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
they look and can't see. lovely job :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student
Wonderful :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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DoktorSpankenstein Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Been there... am there.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Witty all the way to the end, but I found myself returning particularly to the very first stanza. That one could be a poem unto itself.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It could, yes.
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
"However hollow, I’ve got
these artist hands,

these god hands of mine
that can save lives."

... this line is beautiful. Hollow hands can bear substantial meanings, and I see the pulse in your words. Good work.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
;)
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darkorse Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Good work, love the theme.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
However hollow, I’ve got
these artist hands,

these god hands of mine
that can save lives.


:heart: :heart: :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
4th stanza, 2nd word - did you mean "good" or "god" ?

the imagery here is wonderful, by the way.
great job.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I meant god. C:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
haha alright, just checking c:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, and thank you for the compliment! :)
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blacksoul4321 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
I really like it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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blacksoul4321 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Your welcome.
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fooxd Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nice !!!!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
I love how the title is the sound of a heartbeat and then the line "writers veins" It makes this an amazing piece of poetry :D
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Glad you noticed! C:
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
You're welcome :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"What’s the point
when I’ve got little
writers veins

& no one can ever seem
to find my pulse?"


...probably one of the most memorable and truthful handful of lines I will ever read in a piece of poetry.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well--it's the truth. No one ever can. I have to find it for them. lol
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Frankly, if it was anything like a situation where the damn nurses can't find my veins when they're drawing blood and all I want to do is race out of the room screaming, then I'd make a bloody map of my skin for them. :|
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly! Sometimes we have to. But then a lot of us have rolling veins. And that's never fun.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm actually cringing just remembering when I had four different nurses rolling my veins and everything is just ugh. ;_;
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My sister had to get stuck 7 times the last time she had to go to the hospital. :((((
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