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i am shipwrecked fever;
kerosene sleep,
& she is denied oxygen.

i taste sirens on the shore
of her collarbones,
& salt-licked sea limbs.

but, it's the natural disaster
wrapped around her coral spine
that really has my lungs
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:icondearpoetry:
Please cure me of this dreaded writers block. T^T

But it seems most of my work is a form of writers block. :/

Oh well.

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EDIT: A DD? WHAT? On this ol' thing? Thank you so much! :heart:
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respiration. by *DearPoetry catches the eye with interesting metaphors. ( Suggested by *Namicat101 and Featured by `thorns )
:iconvalleigh:
Your over all poem is very good, you gave it a twist, and I love it.

You made this poem stand out, and made it your own, I loved how you really reached out tho the reader, good job.

Your a good writer and you know how to keep your poem flowing.

The over all set up of this poem caught my eye, and made me want to read it. The more interesting and eye catching you make your work, shows you know what your doing. I want to wish you the best of luck at writing, you have true talent.
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:iconjade-pandora:
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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:iconkenyaninja:
~Kenyaninja Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist
It's so pretty and while abstract, still seems to remain well centered around the title 'respiration '. And spinning spinning was interesting.
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:icondearpoetry:
*DearPoetry Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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*hazeltown Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love this.
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:icondearpoetry:
*DearPoetry Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconsphoric:
~Sphoric Feb 10, 2013  Student Writer
I dig yo styyyle.
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*DearPoetry Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, dog. ;)
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:iconrosescarlet:
~RoseScarlet Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Like, wow.
Is this a specific type of poem or is it just your own style?
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:icondearpoetry:
*DearPoetry Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's just free verse. :)
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~RoseScarlet Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Ok. How do you get your style to be so abstract?
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