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i am shipwrecked fever;
kerosene sleep,
& she is denied oxygen.

i taste sirens on the shore
of her collarbones,
& salt-licked sea limbs.

but, it's the natural disaster
wrapped around her coral spine
that really has my lungs
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Please cure me of this dreaded writers block. T^T

But it seems most of my work is a form of writers block. :/

Oh well.

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EDIT: A DD? WHAT? On this ol' thing? Thank you so much! :heart:
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Given 2013-01-09
respiration. by *DearPoetry catches the eye with interesting metaphors. ( Suggested by Namicat101 and Featured by thorns )
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Your over all poem is very good, you gave it a twist, and I love it.

You made this poem stand out, and made it your own, I loved how you really reached out tho the reader, good job.

Your a good writer and you know how to keep your poem flowing.

The over all set up of this poem caught my eye, and made me want to read it. The more interesting and eye catching you make your work, shows you know what your doing. I want to wish you the best of luck at writing, you have true talent.
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PhantomxHeart Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my, your words.. I can't even fathom the depth and beauty of this piece especially. Wonderful and beautiful.
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SexxyStrawberry Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
I love what you did at the end with spinning. 
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mare-wrath Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
i am going on like three years or something now. i write disjointed lines constantly, seriously, every day, and cant produce anything that even slightly resembles something finished
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Drydell-da-Vinci Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
If this is a form of writer's block, I should get blocked more often O_o
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha! C:
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Redheadmermaid1 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student General Artist
This is lovely, you are good at putting words together, very nice
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! C:
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TheAnimalsRight Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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