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i am shipwrecked fever;
kerosene sleep,
& she is denied oxygen.

i taste sirens on the shore
of her collarbones,
& salt-licked sea limbs.

but, it's the natural disaster
wrapped around her coral spine
that really has my lungs
                           s
                             p
                           i
                              n
                            n
                              i
                            n
                              g.
Please cure me of this dreaded writers block. T^T

But it seems most of my work is a form of writers block. :/

Oh well.

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EDIT: A DD? WHAT? On this ol' thing? Thank you so much! :heart:
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Given 2013-01-09
respiration. by *DearPoetry catches the eye with interesting metaphors. ( Suggested by Namicat101 and Featured by thorns )
:iconvalleigh:
Your over all poem is very good, you gave it a twist, and I love it.

You made this poem stand out, and made it your own, I loved how you really reached out tho the reader, good job.

Your a good writer and you know how to keep your poem flowing.

The over all set up of this poem caught my eye, and made me want to read it. The more interesting and eye catching you make your work, shows you know what your doing. I want to wish you the best of luck at writing, you have true talent.
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PhantomxHeart Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my, your words.. I can't even fathom the depth and beauty of this piece especially. Wonderful and beautiful.
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SexxyStrawberry Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
I love what you did at the end with spinning. 
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mare-wrath Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
i am going on like three years or something now. i write disjointed lines constantly, seriously, every day, and cant produce anything that even slightly resembles something finished
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Drydell-da-Vinci Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
If this is a form of writer's block, I should get blocked more often O_o
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha! C:
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Redheadmermaid1 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student General Artist
This is lovely, you are good at putting words together, very nice
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! C:
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:icontheanimalsright:
TheAnimalsRight Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love it
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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Kenyaninja Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's so pretty and while abstract, still seems to remain well centered around the title 'respiration '. And spinning spinning was interesting.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconhazeltown:
hazeltown Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love this.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconsphoric:
Sphoric Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
I dig yo styyyle.
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, dog. ;)
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Like, wow.
Is this a specific type of poem or is it just your own style?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's just free verse. :)
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Ok. How do you get your style to be so abstract?
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know. I like word play, and I just try to see what words I can mix together to come up with the best images.
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
ok
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on teh DD, dahlingg! :t:ighthug
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank'ya! :D
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   General Artist
Fo' sho :meow:
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Professional Writer
Ooh lovely! That second stanza is masterful. Congratulations on your DD!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! <3 It was a real surprise.
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Professional Writer
:heart:
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:iconvespera:
vespera Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: congrats on the DD!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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fatallyyours1987 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
intense




in a good way
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconangel-tsuki:
Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Deserving Daily Deviation.... Seriously....wonderful metaphors!!! I love it!
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, glad you think so!
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:iconangel-tsuki:
Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:) I would really love to take some tips from you!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Tips? What kind? :)
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:iconangel-tsuki:
Angel-Tsuki Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well for poetry of course! I seriously don't get tough, high-end words while framing my verses. My vocabulary is just too simple when it comes to my poems. You'd notice that all my poems are written in simple language. I wanna make it look more professional and deep.
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whitetippedwaves Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Breathtaking. :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Swanstalker Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This...this is the best thing I've ever read.

*cough* This fills me with inspiration. *cough*
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: I'm glad!
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Illusional-Magpie Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This might be one of my favorite pieces of poetry ever.
I love it!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, really? :)
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Illusional-Magpie Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes! :D
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Namicat101 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
respiration. truly captivated my imagination, my mind started rolling and running, jumping and soaring with every word I read, and I must say, I have read it many times; inside my head and outside outloud, reading it in every voice I could mimic. I will never forget this poem and its artist, for by time tomorrow I would have read it enough to remember each and every word.
My god I have been waiting for this to be up here *U*
Congrats on the DD, you really really deserve it :)
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:icondearpoetry:
DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much for suggesting it! It was such a wonderful surprise to wake up to this morning! :heart:
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Namicat101 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
You are very welcome :D
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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Doodelay Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student Writer
I never reread poetry but for this one I had to and I finally understand it :D

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