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You told me
I was November’s ambrosia
sweet on your tongue.

But now all I feel
is discord, sieging
and overthrowing
the 3,000 year old tree
inside of me.-

Centuries to grow so tall
and strong-
9 mere minutes to
fall.

You no longer smile anymore.

And I am here,
silent as stone-
the carcass of a dead...
wild thing
hoping you don't leave me
on the side of the road.
My first poem in months, trying to get back into the grove of writing and answering the buildup of secrets in my inbox.

The secret: He was happy before he started dating me…
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ileaheart Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very lovely. I've never thought of "the secret" in such a way and somehow I can relate to it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
Amazing
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752364 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a terrifying feeling, I don't even want to think about it properly. But you captured the vibe perfectly.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry, but thank you.
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I absolutely love the metaphor of roadkill, and that last line ("hoping you don't leave me on the side of the road") is so haunting and compelling. I would recommend removing "silent as stone" though in order to focus the last stanza on just that one, single, deeply powerful concept of the roadkill. The stone analogy doesn't quite fit it and can take a little away from the stanza's effectiveness. Speaking of, I might even suggest focusing the entire poem on that one unified concept, because it's a really great one.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the help!  I'll take your words into consideration when I revise. ^^
I'm glad you liked it!
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous and absolutely effective imagery; gets even better the more you reread it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! C:
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rober2 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Professional Writer
I like it, but I think the metaphors and images are all over. I would like a bit more unity, perhaps?

Good stuff.
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addictivepoison Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Profoundly lovely _K_
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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xeckles Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
i know exactly how that feels...i loved the middle stanza :
"Centuries to grow so tall
and strong-
9 mere minutes to
fall" 

i love this so much <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
It's sad that it's true though. :(
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xeckles Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
you are so good with words, it's amazing ;A; you have so much talent !!! <3

i know what you mean , sometimes its the sad hard truths that no one wants to face and are hard to convey , but sometimes it's simply finding a way to express them that everything fits back into place , yes ? I hope everything goes and stays well for you <33 *hugs*
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Hazelnut-Eyes Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Just..wow..You're a proper word-smith (:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Sacasha Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013

This poem almost brought tears to my eyes, that is, if I had any left.

It was one of the more powerful poems that I ever felt.

 

With a rhyme like a dove and a sting of a bee

It reminds me of the person who's getting over me.

 

I sincerely thank you for putting this up

And, someday, everyone eventually gives-up.

 

Day after day, rain after rain

All this time of fighting the never ending reign.

 

It will never subside

Nor will it collide.

 

All we can do is hope

And never lose the sense of being able to cope.

 

Time is now

Adaptation is forever.

 

(I apologize for this not being as awesome as your work.  I am not the best poet.  But I did my best to get the message across.  And thank you again.)

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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this is wonderful!  Thank you! :D  Stay sweet.
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Sacasha Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
You're welcome.  And please continue to write.  There is just so much meaning behind every word you chose.  Do not give up this ability of yours. :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Never. :)
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Sacasha Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
Good. :) *hugs*
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OnMyWind Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very very beautiful
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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funmonkeydragon Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice..
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
funny your secret is the same as mine..

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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
None of the secrets I've written for are my own. Unless you count every other poem I've written for myself. Lol
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha. still beautiful non the less. 
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MyNameIsKurt Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student General Artist
beautiful shit

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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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RosemonkeyCT Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very good. Especially when I read thee secret it was based  on and I better understood the meaning.

Interesting idea to write poetry like that
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. But I got the idea from a couple other people on tumblr. C: So I can't really claim it. Lol
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha okek :P Still good excecution of the idea
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Rema-Alkhany Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
good
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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luc1d-dream Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! C:
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King-76 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn son!
Thats depresing:'(
And how did ya get that awesome font!?
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
< tt > text < / tt > no spaces.
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King-76 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Argh, so much work!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol
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King-76 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Too much work actually.
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cecegrace Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow... so sad.
I'm curious how you would portray the story of an armadillo through poetry.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why an armadillo? Lol
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cecegrace Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Because they always end up dead on the side of the road
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LadyLaumes Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think the only reason that I haven't watched you yet is because of this insatiable jealousy at your ability to make words...work.

Let's just fix that. *clicks the button*
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I am hardly worthy of someone's jealousy. Thank you though. C:
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