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I am shedding my skin
like the poetry that bleeds
from your ink-cracked lips
onto the bare bones of my
anatomy.

Unfold these moon-shy limbs
that chase silence
& beg stay-with-me.

For you are the only verse
hidden within this labyrinth
of scar-damaged flesh.
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This is so beautiful. When I first read this poem there is such imagery that I could picture every detail perfectly in my mind.

When I re-read it again I found myself able to link it with parts of me and situations that are happening at the current moment.

I think the lines "from your ink-cracked lips onto the bare bones of my anatomy" was what really what sent a shiver down my spine because of your way with words.

I have never read anything at all like this and I think that it is one of the most unique poems I have ever read.

Well done. Bravo.
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student Writer
"moon-shy limbs" beg introspection, digging through the layers of dead skin & bone...
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FrEnChY-cHaN4EVER Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow, your poems are heaven! :iconmonkeyloveplz:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Kaeldra-1 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
I love your poems :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thanks--I'm glad! :D
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Blood-Red-Cure Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree with everyone that it is like the Phantom of the Opera, but it reminded me also of a dying flower. Anyone else?
AND BY THE WAY THIS IS TOTALLY FREAKING AMAZING!!! :heart: :heart: :heart:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU SO MUCH! :heart:
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DarkLondonDreams Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your imagery is amazing. I love it! :)
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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SakuraKittyy Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012   General Artist
Wow, this is amazing! :iconallmyloveplz:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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dramionehuddy Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I feel like it's just me, but this totally reminds me of Phantom of the Opera. o.o

Anyway. This is beautifully written! <3
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Many have said that, actually! lol
And thank you!
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dramionehuddy Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, really? xD
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desianxprincess Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Love the imagery in this! I usually skim past poems on this site, but this one really caught my eye. Beautiful! ♥
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, glad you took the time! :D
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desianxprincess Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
You're most welcome! :)
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ravensong17 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THE PHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANTOME OF THE OPERA IS THERE... IN SIDE MY MIIIIIIIIND!!!!!!!!
lol
sorry
it just reminded me of the phantom... :love:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Everyone keeps saying that. lol
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ravensong17 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
really? wow!
in my opinion if a lot of people think the same thing about poetry it means that it was well written and it gives off an emotion.
THUMBS UP!!! :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
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neko-mancer Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
beautiful!
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Astraflux Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student General Artist
I have hated EVERY poem I read on DA until this one. Thank you, this was worth reading.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've found some gems in the rubble myself.
Glad you found mine worthy--thank you!
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LightningIdle Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I don't know if it was supposed to happen, but I thought of a few people while reading this. The imagery is gorgeous... excellent work.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's however you interpret it.
If you saw someone while reading this, then cool--I'm doing it right! :D
Thank you!
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The ending makes me think of The Phantom Of The Opera.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love Phantom of the Opera! :D
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Me too! I'll admit I'm torn about the sequal Love Never Dies though; On one hand I know the plot sucks and completely destroys the orignal story, but on the other hand I'm still curious and wanna see it.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I actually liked it. The songs were great. :D
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're the first positive view I've heard of it. Maybe I should just go check it out and then decide if it's good or not.
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Just don't take it too seriously and you will like it.
It was pretty predictable, actually. Like a fanfic. lol
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:dalove:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:hug:
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artgeek99 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a super cool image. I am tempted to paint or draw it (:
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, that would be so cool! :)
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artgeek99 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll have to attempt it then, since I've had a few artworks floating around in my head for a while ^^
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